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Saturday, April 16, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday


These sentences are from A New Dream. In this excerpt, my heroine's mother has invited my hero for dinner for the first time. A New Dream is available at: http://www.astraeapress.com/#ecwid:category=662249&mode=product&product=2676585

It felt like spring tonight even though it was almost Halloween. It was nice of Mrs. Emerson to invite him to dinner, but he figured he only had about a fifty-fifty chance of having a good time. Violet’s father still didn’t like him and made no bones about it.

Well, no use to stand outside like a little puppy begging to get in. He rapped on the door, and to his chagrin Fred Emerson came to admit him. He had pasted a smile on his face that showed most of his teeth which, if Matt thought about it too hard, was downright scary.

10 comments:

graylinfox said...

Dinner at 'the parents' is chilling! Nice snippet.

Susanna Fraser said...

Nice six--his nervousness really comes alive.

Cate Masters said...

Go get her! Loved your descriptions, and his voice.

Kathleen Grieve said...

Poor Matt! I feel so bad for him. Hopefully the dinner turns out better than planned!

Sarah Grimm said...

Nothing worse than dinner with the parents. Nicely done!

Jayel Kaye said...

Standing on the porch, waiting for the door to open. what great tension for a first face to face with the parents.

Lorien Velez said...

Great description! Really enjoyed your hero's POV. :)

Jessica K said...

Yes, I really sympathize with the poor guy!

diannehartsock said...

Those first dinners are tough! Poor man.

Lindsay said...

Love 'downright scary'.
I use to hate the first dinner with the parents.