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Sunday, April 21, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Phone Call

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Today's excerpt is a continuation of the manuscript I've been sharing for the last few weeks. To recap, my hero and heroine have been captured by terrorists after their plane crashes in the Amazon. The leader of the bad guys said that he knew David's (my hero) father which doesn't seem too likely because David is the son of an former America president. Turns out they do know each other. I'm picking up today near the end of the phone conversation between the president and the bad guy. The bad guy speaks first.


“I will return your son and his woman and consider my debt to you as paid.”

“It’s paid.”

Rafael pursed his lips. “I have your word you will not ever tell the authorities where I am to be found?”

“You have my word.”

“And you will not come here yourself?” he asked with a chuckle that to David almost sounded nervous.

“If my son is unharmed you have my word.”

“Ah, then we shall do business.”

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26 comments:

Kylie Scott said...

Well, now. This is all very suspicious. Wonder what will happen next?

Elaine Smith said...

This sounds intense. I wonder if they will keep their word. I enjoyed reading about this moment in the negotiations.

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

Hum, negotiating with bad guys? Not a good thing. I have the feeling this is going to get complicated.

charmainegordon author said...

The plot thickens, Elaine. Super eight! Oh those politicians-always in bed with the ones who can get them in trouble.

Sara Barnard said...

What a scary phone call! Everything hangs in the balance in that one little connection ... great!

Brandellavanela said...

I always enjoy reading about ominous negotiations like this. I doubt either side will be keeping their promise...Nice work!

Debbie Doglady said...

I have a feeling that promises won't be kept here. Looking forward to the next instalment!

gemma parkes said...

Very interesting, looking forward to next week!

Veronica Scott said...

Interesting and just sounds too easy somehow, so I'm waiting for a catch to crop up LOL. Terrific excerpt...

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Wonder what debt he owes the ex-President.

J.Rose Allister said...

Oh man, I don't trust this whole thing. ::biting nails::

sue said...

Is the bad guy speaking to the current pres or David's father the former pres? at any rate fascinating dynamics. I'm not participating in WWW partly due to the A-Z challenge. Would love a visit lol

sue said...

Thanks Elaine :D

Ann Swann said...

Oh, what's going to happen? This could get ugly...

Susan Stuckey said...

Definitely makes a reader want to know ALL the rest of the story. Good #8Sentence. Intriguing.

Lauren said...

Great 8! I love the suspense you've created. I'm dying to read more!

Red Wing citizen said...

A former debt? I'll bet the son is wondering about that. A contract seems to be made for their release. But will it really occur?

The Belle in Blue said...

Sounds like they're mixed up in some serious guana. Enjoyed the snippet and look forward to getting more details next time!

~Joyce Scarbrough

Elaine Cantrell said...

Red Wing Citizen, do you have sentences this week? If so, I can't find you in the list, or I'd read your eight.

Evelyn Jules said...

Tsk tsk, all these seedy players making seedy deals. I can hardly imagine what'll happen next! Great work, Elaine!

Carrie-Anne said...

I hope the terrorist is on the level when he says his hostage is unharmed.

katewyland.com said...

And just what is that debt? Or do we want to know? Intriguing.

Jenna said...

I don't trust him either. Why would a bad guy know the President? Sounds fishy to me. Great suspense, Elaine!

The Original Drama Mama said...

So David is able to hear both sides of the phone conversation? Speaker phone? Wonder what's making the bad guy nervous. Hmm...

Daniel said...

Tense situation, all right. You're right in making the dialogue terse. There would be few wasted words in this situation.

karen Y. bynum said...

Definitely need to know what's gonna happen next! Intense 8! :D