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Sunday, April 14, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: So That's Who David's Father Is

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. My excerpt today comes from the same unnamed manuscript I've been sharing with you. To recap, David and Phaedra my hero and heroine are lost in the Amazon rain forest. They were captured by bad guys who took them to a jungle compound. The leader Rafael said that he knew David's father. We pick up where Rafael is calling the hot line set up by David's father whose identity is revealed in today's excerpt. David's father speaks first.


“Hello, Rafael.  You wanted to talk to me?”

“Ah, Richard.  How are you enjoying your stay in Brazil?”

“Very much if you’ve found my son.”

Phaedra liked his voice.  It sounded full of authority, just as an ex-president’s voice ought to.
“As it happens, I did run across your son." 
 
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34 comments:

  1. Lovely exchange, interesting characters.

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  2. Ex-president?! The plot thickens! :)

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  3. Lots of twists and turns here, keeps me reading for sure! Terrific snippet...

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  4. Messing with an ex-pres is just inviting all kinds of trouble.

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  5. Thanks for comment on blog last week. I am in process of re-writing in light of class I am taking.

    Oh very interesting! I like the tone of this, the voice. Ah my brain is filled with screen writing class, difficult and inspiring at the same time!

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  6. Dynamite, Elaine. Short and to the point leaving this reader in suspense.

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  7. Former President Richard? Well, well, well. That puts it into perspective. Great snippet, Elaine. :)

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  8. Ex-president! Great hook there. Looking forward to the next instalment.

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  9. Wow. This snippet packs an entertaining punch.

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  10. Well, that certainly thickens the plot! Great snippet.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  11. Very nice reveal and definitely leads one to want to know/read more

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  12. Oooh, ahhhh! That's one surefire way to make things interesting. Great snippet, Elaine!

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  13. Interesting conversation. It's even more interesting that Phaedra likes Richard's voice. Maybe their fortunes are about to improve!

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  14. Dang! He really does have connections, then! Good 8, Elaine :-)

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  15. The plot deepens. Great eight. I tweeted.

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  16. Intriguing premise! Enjoyed your 8! :D

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  17. Nicely done with this short snippet. I want to know more about the son and what he's been up to.

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  18. Thanks for this snippet.

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  19. Great twist! Thanks for sharing. :)

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  20. wow, I didn't expect that :) Now the question is how does that impact the plot??

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  21. ex-President of what country? An I'll make one and only one try at the captcha. Turn that thing off on Sundays!

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  22. Sue Ann, ex-president of the US. I turned the captcha off last Sunday and got a dozen spam messages from someone who doesn't even speak English. I'm assuming the post is in English because she uses blogger's translation progam, but she is trying to sell things. Before I caught on to what she was doing, she sent 33 spam messages to one post I'd made.

    Thanks to everyone who stopped by. I love reading your comments as much as I love reading your sentences. Have a great week.

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  23. Very good! Ah yes, and now what will he tell the ex-pres?

    History Sleuth's Writings

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  24. Very interesting situation. Way to go, Elaine.

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  25. Oh sweet! I love this. Like minds. I published a similar story...hostage in the jungles of south america thing...a few months back, so I'm hooked now!

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  26. Ohhhh!! That's not enough. I must have more. Very good dialogue. It grabs the readers' attention well.

    Smiles
    Steph

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  27. Ex- president? Wo-ho! I have the feeling the stakes have been raised. Great snippet, Elaine.

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  28. I'm not sure that the connection is good. Will David and Phaedra be pleased about this?

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  29. Great twist, especially because this could be either a good or a bad thing for David.

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