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Sunday, May 12, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Escape!

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. To recap what I've shared so far from this manuscript, my hero and heroine survived a plane crash in the Amazon region and were taken prisoner by some terrorist types when they were trying to walk to civilization. The bad guys kicked my hero David and broke some of his ribs. The bad guys owned a debt to David's father who is a former American president, so the bad guy agreed to return my hero and heroine and consider his debt paid. In this excerpt, they finally escape from the rain forest.

I hope everyone will come back on tuesday for my virtual release party celebrating the release of The Enchanted. I'll post chapter one, and I'm offering a nice prize.  Find more lovely sentences by participating authors here.


The doctor put an oxygen mask over David’s face and gave him an IV.  The pain started to recede when he injected something into the IV.

“I think he’s right about his ribs,” the doctor finally commented.  “We’ll do some x-rays when we get him to the hospital, but I don’t think they’ve punctured his lung.  He doesn’t want to breathe because it hurts him.”

By the time the chopper landed David felt almost human again.  He could breathe better too.  Now if he could only get a bath before that wonderful medicine wore off.

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29 comments:

Michael Estey said...

I wonder what happened, he's hurt.... i'm interested.

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

Bath's help cure almost anything :-) (or at least they make you feel better). I can't help thinking that something horrible is going to happen any moment, though...

Sarah W said...

If he doesn't breathe as deeply as he can, through the pain, he's going to have worse problems down the line . . . poor David!

jeff7salter said...

oh, too SHORT.
I was just getting interested.

Lauren said...

Poor guy! I can't imagine broken ribs and am totally wincing in sympathy for him right now!

Owllady said...

This is pretty expressive. It's kind of a 'linking' snippet, getting us from one scene to another, and it helps break the tension from the previous scene. Nice job.

Susan Stuckey said...

Poor David - didn't remember him being hurt - but broken ribs/punctured lungs is definitely and ouch.

Nicely done and love the ending line. Good #8Sentence

Kate Warren said...

Thank goodness they got out of there!

Is it safe for him to take a bath while the medicine is in effect? I don't know what they gave him but some of those things can be dangerous when mixed with a tub full of water.

Don't know how my Tuesday will go, but I'll try to make it back for the release party. :)

Elaine Cantrell said...

Michael, I can't find your excerpt.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Jeff, did you sign up? Can't find you in the list.

sue said...

hope he gets his bath. I am posted this week - still no story - but some poetry - hope you enjoy

Joanne Stewart said...

Ouch, poor David. I really feel for him. He must be in terrible pain. Lovely snippet!

Evelyn Jules said...

Mmm, medicine is wonderful indeed. This reminds me of the time I got two healthy morphine injections because I was harboring the kidney stone that ate Tokyo. Great excerpt, Elaine!

Violet Bedford said...

That wonderful medicine!

Congrats on the new release. I'll make a note to come back on Tuesday.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Reminds me of the time they gave me too much pain medication in the hospital and I quite breathing.

Jennifer Gravely said...

What an adventure in the Amazon!

charmainegordon author said...

Too short, I agree. More. I want more. Happy sales for your terrific, different story, Elaine.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Sue Ann, a little of that stuff goes a long way. I'm glad you survived it.

Veronica Scott said...

Broken ribs do hurt like nothing else, I can testify to that, so I have deep sympathy for the character! Another excellent excerpt!

Kylie Scott said...

Goodness, hope he's okay. Glad they got some pain killers into him.

Debbie Doglady said...

Glad he got some relief! Looking forward to the next instalment.

Teresa Cypher said...

Yes--before the medication wears off! :-) Good excerpt, Elaine.

If you tweet me @teresa_willow on Twitter, I'll retweet for you about THE ENCHANTED release :-)

Elaine Cantrell said...

thanks, Teresa, I will.

Elaine Cantrell said...

thanks, Teresa, I will.

Jenna said...

I'm so glad he's safe, but man, I know those ribs hurt like heck. And congrats on the coming release! Good luck!

karen Y. bynum said...

Ahh, the power of pain meds! ;) Glad he's okay. Hope he can breathe properly soon! Congrats on the upcoming release! :D

The Belle in Blue said...

Love the "wonderful medicine" line! Looking forward to reading more.

~Joyce Scarbrough

Linda said...

They are finally out. I wonder what will happen next.

India Masters said...

Sorry it's taken so long to comment on your Wewriwa post. I've been so lost in this darn story I'm writing I barely remember to eat until late afternoon.

But I like these exotic settings and kidnapping for ransom, and big strapping men with crazy skills come in and rescue the heroine/hero.