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Sunday, May 5, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Helicopter

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks so much for stopping by. My excerpt today is from my unpublished manuscript that I've been sharing for the last few weeks. Last Sunday, one of the bad guys who've kidnapped David and Phaedra kicked  David and probably broke some of his ribs. He can't breathe, so they put him on a stretcher for the trip throught the jungle to meet his father.


The chopper landed, kicking up dirt and whipping the trees this way and that.  The minute it touched down men in military uniforms jumped out.  David counted ten of them.  They all carried assault rifles which he’d bet they knew how to use.  Maybe they were marines, but he’d bet Special Ops.

The man in front approached Rafael.  “I’m Colonel Russell Sanford,” he shouted over the roar of the chopper blades.  “President Lovinggood requests you release his son and Miss Beckwith to me.”
 
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23 comments:

Summer Ross said...

Thank you for sharing these 8-
One consideration for you would be to explain why he'd think special ops?

~Summer
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Sarah W said...

Whoa. When the president sends in the cavalry, he doesn't mess around, does he?

gemma parkes said...

President Lovingood? I would like to meet him! Great imagery.

Ute Carbone said...

They must be very important to the pres. Makes me wonder why. Nice eight.

Lauren said...

Great set up! I like the tension it builds!

charmainegordon author said...

Out of the jungle and into mess with his daddy. This is terrific.

India Masters said...

I do love special ops. Will stay tuned.

Virginia Kelly said...

He "requests"... with a bunch of spec ops guys. Love it!

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

Seems like a whole boatload of messiness, but who're the bad guys and who are the heroes? I suspect not all is as it seems.

Veronica Scott said...

Well I hope this extraction goes smoothly but i'm on the edge of my chair - terrific snippet!

sue said...

You’ve got quite the espionage thriller .. going on here


I’m still between stories. Turning a screen play into a story. But in the mean time

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Debbie Doglady said...

Don't mess with the president, yes? Great name you gave him too. :-) Looking forward to the next instalment.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

I still want to know what the leverage is.

sue said...

If someone like yourself never heard of it, maybe it is strictly a screen writing device. Thank you

Evelyn Jules said...

Great action, once again! This story continues to intrigue me. Well done, Elaine!

Jenna said...

Somehow this seems to be going too smoothly. I suspect there will be a monkey wrench thrown into the bargain just for good measure! Great 8 though. :)

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Go pres! Great snippet! Love the imagery!

Kylie Scott said...

Things are picking up pace here. Nice 8.

Ella Quinn - Romance Novelist said...

Great eight. Love how this is going.

Ann Swann said...

Love your writing. I could see those trees clearly.

Susan Stuckey said...

Good snippet - hmmm President's son - now THAT does up the curiosity factor of everything!! Definitely want to find out more. Thanks for sharing.

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

I get more and more intrigued every Sunday... where is this going?

Siobhan Muir said...

Hmm, sounds like they mean business, but I'm not convinced the captors will comply. Good snippet, Elaine.