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Saturday, July 20, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Sentence Served

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors.  Today's excerpt takes place when the king came to pick up Prince Alan after his prison sentence was served.  If you're just joining us, the king, Alan's father, sentenced him to a year in prison because he refused to marry the lady his father selected for him.  You can find more lovely sentences from participating authors at http://www.wewriwa.com.

Blurb:

Forced by his father into a marriage he didn’t want, Prince Alan soon finds that his bride isn’t the sweet, submissive creature he expected.  Morgane has the heart of a dragon and beauty beyond compare, but she isn’t thrilled about the marriage either.  When black treachery threatens the kingdom, Morgane and Alan embark on a perilous journey that has an excellent chance of ending in failure and death for them and all of their people.  

Excerpt:

"Please, sit and make yourself comfortable,"

Kynthelig begged the king. "I will send for wine and cake."
 

Bowdyn nodded and seated himself in a cushioned chair

overlaid with rich, gold brocade fabric while servants ran to do

Kynthelig's bidding. They soon returned with a silver tray loaded

with myriad sweet delicacies. A second tray held several bottles of

wine and three golden goblets.
 

A wine taster stepped forward and sampled both wines

before Kynthelig or the king drank.


"This is excellent wine, Kynthelig," the king approved as he
 
sampled the keeper's offering. "╩║Now I do not feel so dry and

parched from my trip across the desert."


 
 


17 comments:

Teresa Cypher said...

I hope you keep writing from this excerpt. I don't like Kynthelig, and I think the reason why is that you did such an excellent job writing him without wasting time fleshing his out too deeply. Just viewing him through Alan's eyes was enough to do the job. :-) Good 8, Elaine!

gemma parkes said...

I am enjoying this story and all the detail you put in to it!

Millie Burns said...

I can almost see the tray of treats and envision the elitism of the two men pictured here.

Maggie said...

You set a vivid scene. Great job, Elaine!

Carrie-Anne said...

I love the details in this scene. It really brings the royal atmosphere alive.

charmainegordon author said...

The fate of wine tasters has always interested me. Wonderful story steeped in historical fact and your vivid imagination.

Veronica Scott said...

Loved the wine taster detail, really a lot of excellent description here. Can't wait for more - terrific snippet!

km scott said...

Great 8! Thanks for sharing!

Owllady said...

I agree with Teresa!

I'm interested in how you show Kynthelig as nearly influential as the king himself. What's that guy into, I wonder??

S. J. Maylee said...

I can see this scene. Well done.

Susan Stuckey said...

Certainly get a wonderful sense of the elitism/snobbery of both men. Nicely done scene setting and character reveal.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

I see the elitism, but I'm not sure this is exactly the place for the gold brocade details.

Lauren said...

Love this! Now I have strange urge to go drink a glass of wine...

sue said...

Didn't Alan get any? bet prison food was not what he was used to

Sarah W said...

I'm glad there was a wine taster--I have a feeling it would be dangerous to simply drink what one was offered in this realm!

karen Y. bynum said...

Rich description and attention to detail. Great 8!

Siren Star said...

Great description! Fabulous 8!