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Sunday, August 18, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Change Is In The Wind

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. My excerpt today is from The Enchanted. If you're a regular visitor you know that the king sentenced his son Prince Alan to prison because he wouldn't marry a woman the king had chosen. The king has arrived at the prison to pick Alan up, but so far all he's done is express gratitude to the prison keeper, a man who beat and starved the prince. I know it looks bleak for poor Alan, but don't worry about him. Things are going to change very soon.  When you finish here, check out all the other lovely authors who're participating. http://www.wewriwa.com

Blurb:

Forced by his father into a marriage he didn’t want, Prince Alan soon finds that his bride isn’t the sweet, submissive creature he expected.  Morgane has the heart of a dragon and beauty beyond compare, but she isn’t thrilled about the marriage either.  When black treachery threatens the kingdom, Morgane and Alan embark on a perilous journey that has an excellent chance of ending in failure and death for them and all of their people.  


Excerpt:

The king stood up and walked over to Alan, whose head

hung low. "You have not made eye contact with me since you

walked into this room. You are not a prisoner anymore. Lift your

head as befits the crown prince of the realm."
 

Alan'ʹs head came up, and he stared straight ahead. The king

smiled. "You have taught him well, Keeper Kynthelig. He no longer

speaks his mind without permission."


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23 comments:

Linda said...

Oh god, what have they done to him?

Or is it that he doesn't speak his mind without permission... yet?

Teresa Cypher said...

Good eight, Elaine. You did such a great job of setting up the conflict between Alan and his father, the King. :-) Nice 8!

Anonymous said...

Thanks for stopping by Linda and Teresa. I do appreciate it.

Joanne Stewart said...

"taught him well"...why do I get the feeling this involved copies amounts of pain? Terrific characterization in here. Nice 8!

Evelyn Jules said...

That king makes me so mad. You've done a great job showing what Alan has gone through just in this blurb. Well done!

charmainegordon author said...

The king is about to get his when the prince is ready. Well done, Elaine. Just great.

Elaine Smith said...

Prince Alan's control is admirable. That phrase "taught him well"...is evocative. I hope the "reaps as he has sown".

Owllady said...

Oh man, there's quite subtle tension here! Is Alan behaving that way temporarily or is it real? If it's real, does someone snap him out of it? Great 8, Elaine :)

gemma parkes said...

Well hopefully he isn't a broken man and is just biding his time, great 8.

Ute Carbone said...

I'm still feeling for Alan. I hope he gets his due soon! :)

A.S. Fenichel said...

I'm a bit worried for him. Poor Alan.

Karysa Faire said...

Ugh! I hate the king! Great job at eliciting those emotions in just 8 sentences.

sue said...

I hope they haven't totally broken him and that he mans up soon and stands up for himself. Good job. The reader really feels for the poor prince.

Frank Fisher said...

I think Alan will speak his mind without permission. I can't see him not doing so. Great, intriguing 8!

Sarah W said...

Yeah, that's a great quality in a Crown Prince.

Methinks the king is being very short-sighted!

Veronica Scott said...

Ok, I'm ready for the prince to break out now and show them what he's really made of! and I can't stand his father, so you've done a terrific job there, making me hate the guy LOL. Excellent excerpt.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Sounds to me like he's learned to hide his feelings--which is all the worse for the king. By the way, I will make ONE try at a captcha. If I don't get it, you don't get a comment.

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

Oh no, they've destroyed his spirit! :(

Eleri Stone said...

Dislike the king intensely. Hang in there Alan!

Susan Schiller said...

Oh, this kingly father is no longer human and it gets worse each week... so much so that I'm cheering on Alan all the more. I really hope his spirit is growing stronger, underneath the subservient actions.

Perhaps he believes he has lost his true love, and so has no reason to live? Or maybe there is a secret life growing down below the surface that is about ready to become known!

Go Alan!

Millie Burns said...

Grr...I hate Alan's dad. What a big fat jerk!!!!

karen Y. bynum said...

Wow, very subtle but intense. I definitely felt for the prince here. Great 8!

stevie-carroll said...

Another excellent eight there.