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Saturday, October 5, 2013

Snippet Sunday

Welcome to Snippet Sunday. Today's excerpt is from my latest WIP. In this excerpt, my hero is in a flooding cellar trying to rescue my heroine's mother whose foot is wedged under some shelves so that she can't escape.

“Clariee!” he roared as water totally covered her face. Grabbing her under the arms he jerked and tugged even though he knew he wouldn’t be able to move her.

At that moment something big and heavy struck the house from the river side. The cabin shivered, and he felt it shift on its foundation. The shelves! The shelves were moving! The bands trapping her foot must have twisted loose.

He heaved Clariee from the water. “Clariee?”

No answer.

 

13 comments:

Iris B said...

Nice action, Elaine! I like it.

Linda said...

So much tension here. I hope she will be alright.

Misa Buckley said...

Ooh, tense!

Frank C. Etier said...

Tense action evokes emotions with which we identify.
Kudos!

PT said...

Nice sense of desperation. Well done!

Sue Ann Bowling said...

So the flooding river freed as well as entrapped her? Hope it was in time.
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sue said...

nice hanger

Alex Jones said...

That's an intense snippet! I hope she's alright... Thanks for sharing :)

Sarah W said...

Oh, now that's the way to write a tense scene! Well done (and I hope she's okay . . . )

authorannelange.com said...

Oh no! Intense. I hope he can save her. Nicely done!

Carrie-Anne said...

That's one intense scene!

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

What an intense scene! Well done!

Cindy Amrhein said...

Oh my. Intense scene. Your picture goes well with it too. Good for you to leave us readers hanging with the last line!
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