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Saturday, January 11, 2014

Saturday Sample and Snippet Sunday: Flood

I finished the edits on my current WIP and sent it to the publisher yesterday. Keep your fingers crossed that they like it. I thought I'd share an excerpt from the book which is titled Flood.
I'd really love to know your opinion.


He set his jaw against the sudden urge to touch her. Her skin would feel like velvet under his hand as he looked into her eyes and slowly lowered his mouth to her moist, red lips. She would taste as sweet as sugar as she allowed him access to her mouth. Then she’d touch him. Her arms would surround him and pull him close. The kissing would intensify as masculine skin met feminine.
Caleb drew a deep breath. This line of thinking had to stop right now. Aria was his boss, not his lover.

Photo Credit:  By Walter Siegmund (Own work) [GFDL (http://www.gnu.org/copyleft/fdl.html), CC-BY-SA-3.0 (http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/) or CC-BY-2.5 (http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by/2.5)], via Wikimedia Commons

10 comments:

SherryGLoag said...

Best wishes for 2014 and good luck with the submission, It seems to be the week for submitting work. I sent one off a couple of days ago and then heard from several others they'd done the same recently.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Thanks, Sherry. Good luck with your submissions.

sue said...

It’s a new year so writers submit.

Maybe change “sweet as sugar” It might be considered a cliche
And instead of using “would” perhaps he imagined.....

What interesting thoughts sliding through his head about his boss lol

Cindy Amrhein said...

Oh wow you had me going for a minute. What a great fantasy description. Good job!
The Murders of Polly Frisch

Linda said...

Someone is going to have trouble concentration on work.

Sarah W said...

Congratulations on the submission!

It's nice to see a man fantasizing for a change---and I love the last line.

Siobhan Muir said...

Sounds like he's setting himself up for trouble. Good snippet, Elaine/ :)

P.T.Wyant said...

Love that last line's reality check!

(Why do I think that reality check is going to bounce?)

Teresa Cypher said...

A mildly sensual scene...I really like this: "The kissing would intensify as masculine skin met feminine."

That last line is a humdinger! lol. I like it!

Elaine, I enjoy that your stories don't cross the line into explicit writing. :-)

Good luck with the submission. I wish you much success. :-)

Veronica Scott said...

I totally enjoyed the snippet and the last line was really amusing (because we all know he'll keep fantasizing, right? Or there's no story to be told here). Excellent excerpt! Best wishes on the submission...