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Saturday, April 26, 2014

Snippet Sunday

Welcome to Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors. I've just started another book, have no idea for a title, and love it so far. I created it from a deleted scene from one of my other books. This is the opening scene in the book. Please do give feedback.  Thanks, and when you are done you can find more great authors at these URLs.

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EXCERPT




Late afternoon. The Isle of Palms hung suspended between the ordinary hustle and bustle of the day and the blue calm of the evening. The tide had come in so the beach house was closer to the ocean than it was in the morning. Rhett parked his car in the driveway and stared at the house in front of him.

He had lived in this place his entire life, but not in this particular house. Hurricane Hugo came along in 1989 and destroyed the first residence, but his parents had rebuilt in the same place. The current home was built on big pillars sunk deep into the ground and had three stories. Big, wraparound porches could be accessed from each of the three stories.



13 comments:

Patricia Kiyono said...

Sounds like the perfect spot for a romance! Can't wait to see what you do with this.

P.T.Wyant said...

I love this line:
The Isle of Palms hung suspended between the ordinary hustle and bustle of the day and the blue calm of the evening.

Teresa Cypher said...

I agree with P.T. That line is gorgeous!

I'm torn about the second para. I kin of felt like it was a lot of information--backstory happening really fast. But, Maybe that's just me. Maybe I don't read enough romance books to realize that it's really common to give backstory so early in the book.

The description of the house is really good. :-) Im going to send to you, via facebook, a photo of an OBX house that it brought to mind. Maybe it will work for visualization for you while you write. :-)

You have me wondering what this story will be about???

Sarah W said...

I want a house like that! :)

Veronica Scott said...

I'd definitely keep reading, I enjoyed the feeling, especially the time of day...great snippet, can't wait for more.

Marcia said...

Oh super nice, Elaine. I'm wondering what happened when that hurricane came through before; how much of the family's life was disrupted. Definitely an excerpt that makes a reader want more.

Karysa Faire said...

Can I live there? Or rent the place out?

Millie Burns said...

I'm ready to pack my bags...

Charmaine Gordon said...

I agree with Teresa re: 2nd paragraph. The back story took me away from the beauty of his present life. Also I think he stared might be changed to a softer he admired or gazed in wonder at his home. Give us a chance to enjoy what he loves. Thanks, Elaine. Missed you.

Siobhan Muir said...

Sounds like a promising beginning, Elaine. :)

susan said...

another book! you're going like gangbusters!

Deleted scenes and ideas are often good for stories of their own

ED Martin said...

Great job with the setting!

Linda said...

Nice description. He seems to have mixed feelings about this place.