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Saturday, July 26, 2014

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors



Welcome to Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors. This is your chance to sample snippets from the work of some great authors. My excerpt today is from my unnamed WIP. To explain, my hero had a one night stand got a woman pregnant. She never told him, but after she died of cancer, her parents called him to come and get the boy. Naturally, my heroine is not a happy camper. In this excerpt, she recalls a conversation with her husband before they got married.

“I don’t think I could stand it if my husband cheated on me; I’ve seen what it did to my mother, and I promised myself I’d never end up that way. I want the whole nine yards for myself, and that includes a faithful husband.” She laughed and threw her arms around him. “I want a fairy tale marriage that everyone envies. I want to love and be loved in return. I want to grow old alongside the man I spent my life with. I want to sit on the porch and kiss when I’m young because I can’t keep my hands off him, and when I’m old… I still want that! I want to be as much in love on the day I die as I am on my wedding day.”


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16 comments:

Botanist said...

Uh-oh...memories like this do not bode well in the current situation.

Teresa Cypher said...

was she unrealistic, or just full of such hopeful optimism? Usually life doesn't work out the way we planned.Although she's recalling a joyous, youthful thought, I heard it in a voice full of bitterness. :-)This gives you such great conflict to write about, Elaine! Good excerpt.z

Allyson said...

I think all women want that and sometimes it doesn't work out. Good snippet.

gemma parkes said...

She's longing for a dream, something most people want in life or at least start of wanting! Well described.

Sarah W said...

I agree with Teresa about her optimism---marriages like that take work---but she told him about her mother and he cheated anyway?

I don't like her husband very much right now.

tinachristopherauthor.com said...

This is a very difficult situation and the contrast between her words and how she feels is obvious. Well done.
I am not sure why is is thinking about his faithfulness. He had this one night stand before he met her, didn't he, or did it happen while they were married?

Sue Ann Bowling said...

What is the boy's age relative to the date of their marriage?

Marcia said...

Wow, she didn't ask for much back then, did she? lol! Well, when you're young and in love, so much seems possible. It never occurs to you that once you make it to your wedding day, things might not work out. Such a sympathetic character. Great job, Elaine.

Millie Burns said...

I know she's gonna be mad at the hubby, but I sure hope she gives the kid a break. It's not his fault.

Linda said...

And apparently he wasn't listening to her that day. That's a tough one.

Elaine Cantrell said...

Teresa, it was youthful optimism speaking. Tina, they were married when it happened. Sue Ann, they had been married for 7 years when the child was born. Millie, don't worry. She isn't going to take it out on the child.

Charmaine Gordon said...

We dream and dreams don't always come true. Beautifully written, Elaine. I feel for her. They'll work it out for the boy's sake. Now get back to writing, my friend.

Veronica Scott said...

Well, I hate to say it, but she's going to have to let go of the fairy tale and decide if the way life turned out has enough good things going for it to stay the course. This story just seems SO true to me, terrific writing! Great 8...

JTsuruoka said...

A beautifully-expressed dream for your character...

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Loved the snippet! And I want all that, too. Working on it. I've been married 29 years and counting.

Siobhan Muir said...

A valid set of hopes...but then life happens. Great snippet, Elaine. :)