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Saturday, August 23, 2014

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors

Today's snippet is still from the same unnamed WIP I've used for the past few weeks. To recap, Senator Landers had a one night stand with a woman who looked much like his wife. Some years later the woman died of cancer, and her parents contacted my hero, Rhett, to tell him he had a son. Naturally, my heroine, Alex is a little unhappy about it. Some of you have hoped she wouldn't be mean to the child, and she isn't. I thought I'd finish this last excerpt with something about the boy, Eric. Next week I'm starting something else. 'She' in the excerpt refers to Alex. She woke up feeling as if someone is watching her. She thought it was probably Rhett, but it wasn't.

She shut her eyes and pretended to be asleep, but gradually the sensation of being watched was so strong that she opened her eyes.
“I want to show you my mama’s picture,” Eric said. He was dressed in shorts and a tee shirt and was barefooted. His blond hair stuck up at the crown the way Rhett’s did before he brushed it.
She pushed herself up and smiled. No matter how she felt about Rhett she couldn’t be mean to a child. “Well, let’s see it.”
Eric approached the bed and handed her the picture. 


Picture: By Pedro Simões from Lisboa, Portugal [CC-BY-2.0 (http://creativecommons.org/licenses/by/2.0)], via Wikimedia Commons

22 comments:

Teresa Cypher said...

Whew! I'm so glad she's rising above it. Good descriptive writing, Elaine. And, boy oh boy, I wonder what she thinks about the picture. It has to resemble her...

Linda said...

He is going to win her heart and she is going to run away with him. He seems so cute.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Sweet interaction. :)

Gem Sivad said...

What a sweet scene. Must read whole book now.

Salisa Waheed said...

So sweet! :D

Frank C. Etier said...

A poignant moment. These two could -- and likely will -- become close, eh?

Sandra said...

You've got me wanting to know what happens next.

Juneta Key said...

Great snippet. Her kindness definitely shined through.
Juneta at Writer's Gambit

E.E. Giorgi said...

I'm curious of what she'll think of the picture, too...

Botanist said...

Wow, such a tangle of emotions to deal with! Wonder how she'll react to the picture.

Sarah W said...

Rhett doesn't deserve her. At all.

But I hope she and this little boy will be good for each other.

Veronica Scott said...

Very nice and I too am glad your heroine can be so pleasant to the child. Thanks for sharing this one!

P.T.Wyant said...

Awww... I'm glad she's not taking it out on the boy. (And he sounds so cute.)

Charmaine Gordon said...

Elaine,it's a breakthrough for them and beautifully written. You've touched my heart.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

I'm glad she isn't blaming the child.

Jenna said...

Very sweet. It's a cold woman who can be mean to a child. Glad she's not one of those. Great description of Eric!

S.J. Maylee said...

All of the snippets from this story really reach out an grab me. Powerful emotions. Well done, Elaine. :)

Siobhan Muir said...

It takes great strength to find that kind of compassion. Great snippet, Elaine. :)

Carol Burnside aka Annie Rayburn said...

Nice interaction and ditto what others have said about the picture. Will she see a resemblance to herself?

tinachristopherauthor.com said...

I am glad she is not showing the little boy the pain she holds inside. Great snippet.

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

Aw, I'm glad she's nice to the child. The actions of his parents are not his fault. Looking forward to her reaction to the picture...

JTsuruoka said...

Nice. Your prose is clean & flows well & you hit the right notes to reveal character.