Suggestions:Change the second "rounded" to another verb.The last sentence (about the parking) is unnecessary.Otherwide, nice 8!
Also, I liked the trailer!
I get a mysterious feel for this place. Interesting name. Take a look at how many times you used 'Rest Thy Head' in the snippet. You might want to replace it with the word inn.
Thanks for the help, guys, but unfortunately, it's too late to change things now. Rest Thy Head released on Sept. 23. No matter how how many time you proof something you always miss things, or at least I do.
Great snippet! Loved the trailer!
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