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Saturday, February 11, 2017

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors


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We know so far that Rocky ticked off drug dealers and had to fake his death so he can enter the witness protection program. Last week Rocky called Aimee even though he wasn't supposed to and told her he'd bought a house for them. I'm skipping forward a few paragraphs to the time when Aimee is almost at Rocky's new house. She has car trouble, and next week she'll be meeting the answer to her problem. Some creative punctuation. 

Excerpt:
Aimee groaned and laid her head down on her car’s steering wheel. Her GPS told her she was only five miles from Rocky’s new property, but her car wouldn’t go. It had slowed down and rolled to a gentle stop on the side of the road thirty minutes ago. Nothing she could think to do had revived it. In desperation she had even tried to find her owner’s manual, a useless task if ever there was one.

Where were the police or the highway patrol when you needed them; not one single car had passed her on the small country road. Oh, My, Goodness! Was it dangerous in this isolated place? If she got kidnapped, nobody would ever know what happened to her. She’d end up on a milk carton or bulletin board somewhere with the caption ‘Have you seen this girl?’ under her picture. 

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14 comments:

Teresa Cypher said...

Nice list of really bad possibilities help to define her state of mind. She's definitely in a pickle!

Ed Hoornaert said...

Not only is she in a predicament, her mind is starting to run amok. Loved the line about the owner's manual -- so true.

Charmaine Gordon said...

I know how she feels. Been there/done that. Amok is the word. You captured the range of hysteria. We're all on edge!

Nancy Gideon said...

Bad to worse, indeed! Milk carton! Snort! The things we think of in times of trouble. Great scene, Elaine.

Veronica Scott said...

I sympathize with her! And that was a funny aside about her trying to find the owners' manual - SO true. Enjoyed the excerpt...

Aurora Springer said...

yes, I'd hate to be stranded with a broken car and no place in sight.

Kimberly Gould said...

Sounds like someone should have planned better, at least let someone know where she was going. I hope she finds her way on foot.

Siren X Star said...

This is such a great description! Been there and have felt that same way, it kind of makes me cringe at the thought. I'm sure most of us can relate.

Rachel de Vine said...


Very frustrating for her. My first thought would be to check the fuel gauge! She's in a bit of a fix.

Amy Braun said...

She's definitely in a mess. Hope she gets out of it!

Siobhan Muir said...

She's right to worry about that, but on the other hand, if the weather's not bad, she could always walk. Good snippet, Elaine.

Christina Ochs said...

Yikes! Hopefully Rocky is keeping an eye out for her. In that hilly country, phones don't always get signal.

Caitlin Stern said...

I bet he's useless for a rescue--she needs someone to come along. At least her car might be fixable...

Iris B said...

Really liked the bits of humour in the scene to balance the desperate situation. great snippet.