tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post1323499109641853333..comments2024-03-28T21:33:06.181-04:00Comments on Hope. Dreams. Life... Love: Sweet Saturday SampleElaine Cantrellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-53970336067330455452012-07-08T14:52:07.556-04:002012-07-08T14:52:07.556-04:00Ladies, thank you so much for stopping by. Jenna,...Ladies, thank you so much for stopping by. Jenna, is in medieval times so I do need to fix that time.Elaine Cantrellnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-28696384406629452652012-07-08T07:29:17.003-04:002012-07-08T07:29:17.003-04:00Very powerful scene. There's so much back hist...Very powerful scene. There's so much back history in it while at the same time revealing the cruelty of both father's.Sherry Gloaghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03143365764333974956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-40628755824947516522012-07-08T00:45:39.756-04:002012-07-08T00:45:39.756-04:00Great sample. The imagery is wonderfully done. I...Great sample. The imagery is wonderfully done. I have a question, though. Is the setting medieval? I wasn't sure of the time frame and wondered about the specific times of 6:30 and 6:45. If it is set in the medieval period, they wouldn't have had such specific times. If I've got the period wrong, then please disregard that part of my comment (but not the other!).Jennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10308158251486924808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-58106912338582561512012-07-07T23:51:11.875-04:002012-07-07T23:51:11.875-04:00Thanks for stopping by laurel and Sandy. Sandy, t...Thanks for stopping by laurel and Sandy. Sandy, thank you. You're absolutely right.Elaine Cantrellnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-41805309195867940872012-07-07T23:12:11.611-04:002012-07-07T23:12:11.611-04:00I love this excerpt. You've done a great job o...I love this excerpt. You've done a great job of using the senses: sound, touch (her painful feet), visual, etc., to make the scene come alive. <br /><br />Since you asked for feedback, I did notice one thing--mainly because this is something I do often and have a hard time catching. You told us that Morgane hated her father, and then she said, "I hate him, Edana" in dialogue. I think you could eliminate the "tell."Sandra Nachlingerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16906884446237370105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-39575439465766770802012-07-07T18:32:55.858-04:002012-07-07T18:32:55.858-04:00Oh, what a sad life Morgane has lived. I hope the...Oh, what a sad life Morgane has lived. I hope the prince is good to her. Thanks for sharing...and for visiting my sample.Laurel-Rain Snowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00101090217639410913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-19919770432853560472012-07-07T14:32:43.833-04:002012-07-07T14:32:43.833-04:00Ladies, thanks for your comments, and yes, it shou...Ladies, thanks for your comments, and yes, it should be lightening. Nothing like new eyes to find mistakes.Elaine Cantrellnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-77348477168160753442012-07-07T13:57:52.211-04:002012-07-07T13:57:52.211-04:00Wow! A powerful piece. My only wonder is: was &...Wow! A powerful piece. My only wonder is: was "lighting" supposed to be "lightning" (in the first sentence)? <br /><br />I hope Morgane falls madly in love with her prince. They both deserve a bit of happiness. That he's a rebel who's suffered at the hands of his father, too, means they have something in common without having met. I can see them immensely stronger together than they were apart. <br /><br />--Kimberly K. ComeauCaseyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07017592090888125590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-43951438864856814002012-07-07T13:53:58.442-04:002012-07-07T13:53:58.442-04:00Great snippet! I loved the heroine anguish.Great snippet! I loved the heroine anguish.Tmonique Stephenshttp://www.tmoniquestephens.comnoreply@blogger.com