tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post6619235181805294147..comments2024-03-25T15:57:10.853-04:00Comments on Hope. Dreams. Life... Love: Saturday Sample and Weekend Writing WarriorsElaine Cantrellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-55770450597395748462021-03-23T13:29:17.063-04:002021-03-23T13:29:17.063-04:00Unless it's pertinent to the story, she should...Unless it's pertinent to the story, she shouldn't downgrade herself out loud to the client. Think it, yes, definitely. Or, he could bring it up with "I imagine you're wondering why I chose you instead of..." Otherwise, I like the way you're leading up to the what and why he wants to see her. I know they have to do the formalities first, but you could show her antsiness (is that a word) and wanting to get to the point. This story has me very curious.Diane Burtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03754105332297068271noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-38779530101486218332021-03-21T23:27:05.978-04:002021-03-21T23:27:05.978-04:00I'm curious to know why he chose her, too, if ...I'm curious to know why he chose her, too, if he could have gone with anyone. Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-34766286927450057122021-03-21T17:14:22.533-04:002021-03-21T17:14:22.533-04:00Yes, he could. So why pick her? This is a major pl...Yes, he could. So why pick her? This is a major plot point that will hopefully lead us to a large part of the premise for this story. Great beginning. Can't wait for more!Jennahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10308158251486924808noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-33847398712584882682021-03-21T15:46:46.169-04:002021-03-21T15:46:46.169-04:00Great question. Why her? Answer should be intere...Great question. Why her? Answer should be interesting. Great snippet.Shari Elderhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03687408194572664044noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-87176317117889297302021-03-21T11:49:59.945-04:002021-03-21T11:49:59.945-04:00She raises a good point and the answer will be fas...She raises a good point and the answer will be fascinating, may tell us a lot....or not! Enjoyed the snippet!Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-29840563192203237242021-03-21T11:20:29.898-04:002021-03-21T11:20:29.898-04:00From the description of the Silvers, I daresay he ...From the description of the Silvers, I daresay he could have anyone he wanted. So, why her? <br /><br />Good to make a reader ask questions. <br /><br />Elaine, we aren't strict anymore about the snippet length. Participation has to make marketing sense for authors. :-)Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-73908966474809816142021-03-21T10:29:19.301-04:002021-03-21T10:29:19.301-04:00Oh, girl, don't downgrade yourself like that t...Oh, girl, don't downgrade yourself like that to a client! Sorry, just being a bit overly protective of your character.Nancy Gideonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07493107610530282642noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-19069791769454413142021-03-21T08:31:16.780-04:002021-03-21T08:31:16.780-04:00I'm very curious as to how he'll answer he...I'm very curious as to how he'll answer her.Jessica E. Subjecthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14356934162311768234noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8565893280908397886.post-22013466430668325892021-03-20T10:57:24.600-04:002021-03-20T10:57:24.600-04:00I love the idea of your Saturday sample and sharin...I love the idea of your Saturday sample and sharing a work in progress with readers. I also enjoy your bookish website alive with books. You're hosting my book tour for Eat Your Heart Out, and that's how I discovered you. <br /><br />If you'd like to write a column and talk about your work in progress or what it's like doing book tours (I also host authors and tours but not as regularly as you do) please let me know and you can guest post on my blog. <br /><br />Here: http//midagedating.com <br /><br />Thanks so much for sharing Dana and Alex's story on your blog! <br />ShirleyShirley Goldberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17686320743650132312noreply@blogger.com