I had intended to share some more sentences from The Welcome Inn this week, but I'm on vacation and don't have access to the book. So, I guess I'll share something from the historical novel I'm playing around with. Let me know if I need to go back to the drawing board.
He figured he could have handled everything if only they'd won, but they hadn't won. They had given their life's blood, and the result was galling, bitter defeat which no one would ever, could ever forget. He fumbled with the twine and tied small knots that his fingers were too big to tie and heaved himself to his feet. Just a few more steps now. He had walked all the way from Appomattox, Virginia so surely he could walk around the two wide, pleasant curves in the road that stood between him and home. Yes, after three years, four months, and two days he was finally home.
Elaine - I love this!
ReplyDeleteGreat insight into his despair at losing, and yearning for home. Love this six too!
ReplyDeleteDon't go back to the drawing board. This sounds very intriguing, wonder what/who he will find when he reaches home.
ReplyDeleteAfter all that and he'd lost - very moving.
ReplyDeleteI love how you showed his pain
ReplyDeleteYes, keep going. I want to know what's left at home, too!
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ReplyDeleteIntriguing: wish I could read more! Good feel to this, even though the MC is mulling over defeat. ;)
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Bittersweet homecoming. Heartfelt snip!
ReplyDeleteExcellent characterization here. The character leaps off the page. Great snippet. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThis breaks my heart. I love it. Love his voice, the bitter desperation, stoicism and despair that shows through. Haven't read a good Civil War or post-Civil War tale in a good, long time. (I'm such a sucker for a hero who's gone through the fires of war.)
ReplyDeleteSounds so melancholy. I truly enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteHeart-wrenching. Great job, Elaine.
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Allure
Love the image of his hands and the twine!
ReplyDeleteLove it!
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