Saturday, May 19, 2012

Sweet Saturday Sample: Smelling Salts

Quick!  Bring me some smelling salts. Her Kind of Man is number 6 in romance and number 22 overall at Fictionwise!  Am I happy?  Oh, yeah.

In this excerpt Ross my hero has just met my heroine Kara in the grocery store. Ross has been in love with Kara for a long time, but she wouldn't give him the time of day. Now that Kara's sister stole her fiance, Ross decides to ask Kara for a date.


At that moment, Kelly and Brandon turned onto aisle three. Kara saw them about the same time they saw her. Everyone froze, but then Kelly grabbed Brandon’s arm and marched down the aisle toward Ross and Kara. Ross watched Kara’s hackles rise to cover the misery written on her face. He thought for sure he and Brandon would soon be breaking up a cat fight right in the middle of Chef’s Pantry.

Kelly looked scared and defiant all at the same time.  “Hello, Kara.”

Kara’s nose rose a bit as she nodded to Brandon and Kelly. She turned her back to them and said, “Yes, Ross, I’d enjoy having dinner with you. What time will you pick me up?”

Ross wasn’t a fool. He knew why she’d said yes, but he didn’t care. After years of waiting for a date with her, he refused to get picky about her motivation for going out with him.

 “I’ll pick you up at six. There’s a little French restaurant in Greenville called Bienvenue that my brother told me about. I think you’d like it.”

“Sounds great! I look forward to it.” Kara nodded once more to her sister and Brandon as she hurried away, trying to look as if she wasn’t hurrying.

Brandon confronted Ross as soon as Kara disappeared from sight. “You know she’s only going out with you to hurt me. She’s vulnerable right now. You’re taking advantage of her, and I don’t like it.”

A red haze swirled in front of Ross’s face. “Which sister do you want, Brandon? Kara or Kelly? Better make up your mind quick.”

Her Kind of Man is available at http://www.fictionwise.com/ebooks/b133189/Her-Kind-of-Man/Elaine-Cantrell/?si=0

9 comments:

  1. Ooooh, I really don't like Brandon, and I hope he ends up with neither sister. Ross, on the other hand, seems like a nice guy. I hope Kara will realize that. You've done a great job creating tension in this scene.
    And congratulations on your #6 and #22 rankings -- fantastic!

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  2. Thank you, Sandy. I'm thrilled about the rankings. I didn't like Brandon either. He isn't the nice guy that Ross is.

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  3. Are you going to smack Brandon are am I, Ross? Great piece. I have to get this book, Elaine. It sounds too good to miss. Love you are doing so well, too. Kudos. Well deserved.

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  4. When are you putting this on B & N? I tried to buy it there but it's not listed.

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  5. Thank you, Jean. The publisher works at a glacial pace. Try getting it at Fictionwise. B&N owns them.

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  6. Thems is fighting words in the last line

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  7. I especially love the last line. I mean, I LOVE it! *grin* And congrats on the rankings!

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  8. Great sample, Elaine, but apologies for not really concentrating on the story .... This is one very very hot cover! Congratulations on the #6 ranking. Well deserved!

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  9. I really like Ross! I hope Brandon and Kelly get what they deserve.

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