Saturday, November 17, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday: Retribution

Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday.  Today's excerpt comes from an unpublished manuscript titled Blue 52.  In this excerpt, my hero and his grandfather have just viewed the bodies of his mother and father.  The history books say that his mother murdered his father who was the president of the US, but neither Hank nor his grandfather believes it.  Hank's grandfather, Senator Lovinggood speaks first.


“The trail’s pretty cold, but even after thirty years you never know what you might turn up if you shake the bushes a little.”

A cool little grin played along Hank’s lips.  “Yeah, that’s exactly what I was thinking.” 

They exchanged a look which visibly startled Senator Lovinggood.  If he hadn’t known that Richard still lay in his coffin at Sinclair’s, he would have sworn that his son rode beside him again after all these years.  Maybe it was a trick of the light, but just maybe it was a new look in Hank’s eyes, a look that promised justice for his mother and retribution for his father.

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9 comments:

  1. JennaNovember 18, 2012 at 12:19 AM

    This sounds like such a great story! You keep posting, I'll keep reading! I want to see if Hank's really going to get to the bottom of this.

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  2. Elaine CantrellNovember 18, 2012 at 7:56 AM

    Thanks, Jenna. I haven't heard from the publisher yet if they want it or not. Keeping my fingers crossed.

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  3. UnknownNovember 18, 2012 at 11:08 AM

    Great six! Hope Hank is able to learn something new.

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  4. SherryGLoagNovember 18, 2012 at 1:50 PM

    This certainly caught my attention. nice 6.

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  5. Elaine cantrellNovember 18, 2012 at 1:55 PM

    Thanks Jen and Sherry. Hank stood in his father's shadow for so long, it was a pleasure to let him come into his own.

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  6. Sarah WNovember 18, 2012 at 4:02 PM

    I like this---especially the Senator's reaction!

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  7. CallieNovember 18, 2012 at 5:19 PM

    Very tense. Good visual, I liked it.

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  8. Elaine CantrellNovember 18, 2012 at 5:30 PM

    Thanks so much, Callie and Sarah.

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  9. Lyric JamesNovember 18, 2012 at 6:45 PM

    Oh very nice. Like the premise of this story. Love mystery!

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