Saturday, December 22, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday: Bad Father

Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday.  Are you ready for Christmas yet?  I'm finally getting there.  My excerpt for today comes from a manuscript I just submitted.  Keep your crossed for me.  This is the first fantasy I've written, so it was a lot of fun for me.  Anyway, here are the first six sentences of the manuscript.


King Bowdyn sprang from his throne and paced around the room like a crazed tiger as his son knelt before the huge golden throne studded with crimson and emerald stones.  “Perhaps you did not understand me, Alan,” he snarled.  His hands clenched into fists held rigidly to his side.  “This is not a request, but a command.  You will marry Lady Maybina before the next full moon has passed.”
 
Alan dared not raise his eyes from the floor.


I hope you and yours have a wonderful holiday season.

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7 comments:

  1. AnonymousDecember 23, 2012 at 11:46 AM

    Alan is not happy. Good six, Elaine and Happy Holiday back to you and your loved ones.

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  2. Pauline WilesDecember 23, 2012 at 2:08 PM

    I enjoyed the imagery you create with the throne/tiger/pacing. Great conflict, too!

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  3. Sarah WDecember 23, 2012 at 2:41 PM

    Good luck, Elaine!

    I love the last line especially--that one small non-movement really helps heighten the tension.

    Happy holidays!

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  4. Karen Michelle NuttDecember 23, 2012 at 8:35 PM

    Oh the last line has me intrigued to know more now. Fantastic six!

    I wan to wish you a Merry Christmas!

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  5. Elaine CantrellDecember 23, 2012 at 8:57 PM

    Thanks to everyone who spent a minute with me today. I hope everyone has a Merry Christmas.

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  6. Sue Ann BowlingDecember 24, 2012 at 3:06 AM

    Don't think I'd like to be Alan.

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  7. J.M. BlackmanDecember 24, 2012 at 1:59 PM

    Fantastic opening lines. I love the sprinkling of details from the throne's appearance to Alan's lifting on his eyes--really makes the scene easy to visualize.

    Good luck with your submission & happy holidays, Elaine! <3

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