He felt a blow to
the back of his neck that sent a shower of sparks falling across his vision and
knocked him to the ground. A booted foot
met his ribs a second later.
Two men hauled him
to his feet and dragged him over to the man who seemed to be in charge. “What are you going to do, Rafael?” the one
who had kicked David asked.
“I think we should
all have a turn with the woman,” a burly man with only one eye said as he
leered at Phaedra who now stood defiantly naked before them.
they are and why they are here.” He pointed at David.
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This snippet tells me more about Phaedra than anything else...if I was caught naked with a bunch of thugs, I don't think I'd be able to stand defiantly! I hope her attitude wins her some respect from the leader.
ReplyDeleteThey are in for a truckload of misery it seems. I'm just hoping David or Phaedre one figures a way out of this. Can't wait to find out if they do. I'm on the edge of my seat over this one!
ReplyDeleteWow, this scene just keeps getting more tense. Sure hope nothing awful happens to Phaedra (well and David too!)
ReplyDeleteYour heroine sure has guts...This scene just keeps getting more intense with each snippet!
ReplyDeleteTerrific eight and scary, Elaine. I admire the couple and wonder what happens next.
ReplyDeleteburly man with one eye - great detail
ReplyDeleteHow brave can she be. Wow! not sure I could handle it that well. Great job and very good cliff hanger. :-)
ReplyDeletePhaedra seems very brave! This is fraught with suspense and I'm looking forward to the next instalment.
ReplyDeleteGreat suspense, but I think if I kept reading, it would be with one hand over my eyes. The idea that they would take turns with her is horrible (realistic, but horrible). I love that she's not showing her fear
ReplyDeleteI love the description of the "shower of sparks" falling across his vision. Lovely. Phaedra is one plucky woman to be able to remain defiant, despite the situation. I hope they manage to find a way out of their predicament.
ReplyDeleteI love Phaedra's pluck in this very tense situation. I hope that she and David will prevail.
ReplyDeleteI'm loving the intensity of your snippet. It pulled me right in.
ReplyDeletePluck or shock? That's one scary situation.
ReplyDeleteYikes! Well, at least the interrogation will give them some time to figure a way out!
ReplyDeleteOoo, intense! Great 8!
ReplyDeleteEep! I'm scared for them! Can't wait to find out what happens next!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad the guy in charge isn't jumping on the rape bandwagon. Hopefully they can get out of this without too much damage.
ReplyDeleteGulp. You've got me by the throat here, Elaine. Excellent snippet. Very tense. I hope they get out that!
ReplyDeleteIntense scene. Wonder how they're going to get out of this situation.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet, Elaine. You could change "He felt a blow to the back of his neck that sent a shower of sparks falling across his vision and knocked him to the ground." to "A blow to the back of his head sent a shower of sparks across his vision and knocked him to the ground." It tightens the writing and makes us more present in his problems. I'm nervous for both of them. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat build of tension. Well done!
ReplyDeleteSiobhan, you're right! Thanks. And thanks to everyone else who commented as well.
ReplyDeleteA very bad situation here! I wonder if what David says will affect what they decide to do? I'll be back. :)
ReplyDeleteIt looks bad for them. Wow! Great action writing, Elaine :-)
ReplyDeleteElaine, I love how the action flows. A very suspenseful snippet!
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Steph
Great action and suspense.
ReplyDeleteWhat a tense moment! Phaedra is incredibly brave. I'd be freaked out in a situation like that. Hopefully, David has a good reason for them being there...?
ReplyDeleteThis is so frightening. Great job with the tension here, Elaine!
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