Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Today's excerpt is a continuation of the manuscript I've been sharing for the last few weeks. To recap, my hero and heroine have been captured by terrorists after their plane crashes in the Amazon. The leader of the bad guys said that he knew David's (my hero) father which doesn't seem too likely because David is the son of an former America president. Turns out they do know each other. I'm picking up today near the end of the phone conversation between the president and the bad guy. The bad guy speaks first.
“I will return
your son and his woman and consider my debt to you as paid.”
“It’s paid.”
Rafael pursed his lips. “I have your word
you will not ever tell the authorities where I am to be found?”
“You have my
word.”
“And you will not
come here yourself?” he asked with a chuckle that to David almost sounded nervous.
“If my son is
unharmed you have my word.”
“Ah, then we shall
do business.”
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Well, now. This is all very suspicious. Wonder what will happen next?
ReplyDeleteThis sounds intense. I wonder if they will keep their word. I enjoyed reading about this moment in the negotiations.
ReplyDeleteHum, negotiating with bad guys? Not a good thing. I have the feeling this is going to get complicated.
ReplyDeleteThe plot thickens, Elaine. Super eight! Oh those politicians-always in bed with the ones who can get them in trouble.
ReplyDeleteWhat a scary phone call! Everything hangs in the balance in that one little connection ... great!
ReplyDeleteI always enjoy reading about ominous negotiations like this. I doubt either side will be keeping their promise...Nice work!
ReplyDeleteI have a feeling that promises won't be kept here. Looking forward to the next instalment!
ReplyDeleteVery interesting, looking forward to next week!
ReplyDeleteInteresting and just sounds too easy somehow, so I'm waiting for a catch to crop up LOL. Terrific excerpt...
ReplyDeleteWonder what debt he owes the ex-President.
ReplyDeleteOh man, I don't trust this whole thing. ::biting nails::
ReplyDeleteIs the bad guy speaking to the current pres or David's father the former pres? at any rate fascinating dynamics. I'm not participating in WWW partly due to the A-Z challenge. Would love a visit lol
ReplyDeleteThanks Elaine :D
ReplyDeleteOh, what's going to happen? This could get ugly...
ReplyDeleteDefinitely makes a reader want to know ALL the rest of the story. Good #8Sentence. Intriguing.
ReplyDeleteGreat 8! I love the suspense you've created. I'm dying to read more!
ReplyDeleteA former debt? I'll bet the son is wondering about that. A contract seems to be made for their release. But will it really occur?
ReplyDeleteSounds like they're mixed up in some serious guana. Enjoyed the snippet and look forward to getting more details next time!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Red Wing Citizen, do you have sentences this week? If so, I can't find you in the list, or I'd read your eight.
ReplyDeleteTsk tsk, all these seedy players making seedy deals. I can hardly imagine what'll happen next! Great work, Elaine!
ReplyDeleteI hope the terrorist is on the level when he says his hostage is unharmed.
ReplyDeleteAnd just what is that debt? Or do we want to know? Intriguing.
ReplyDeleteI don't trust him either. Why would a bad guy know the President? Sounds fishy to me. Great suspense, Elaine!
ReplyDeleteSo David is able to hear both sides of the phone conversation? Speaker phone? Wonder what's making the bad guy nervous. Hmm...
ReplyDeleteTense situation, all right. You're right in making the dialogue terse. There would be few wasted words in this situation.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely need to know what's gonna happen next! Intense 8! :D
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