Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. I appreciate all of the comments and encouragement you've given me as I posted from one of my WIP's. Today I'm switching to another book, The Enchanted. The Enchanted came out on May 14. If you're interested in reading the entire first chapter, scroll down to Tuesday's online release party. The Amazon link for the book is http://www.amazon.com/The-Enchanted-ebook/dp/B00CRUD242/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1368987311&sr=8-1&keywords=the+enchanted+by+elaine+cantrell Here's a blurb, them some sentences. You can find more lovely sentences at http://www.wewriwa.comBlurb: Forced by his father into a marriage he didn’t want, Prince Alan soon finds that his bride isn’t the sweet, submissive creature he expected. Morgane has the heart of a dragon and beauty beyond compare, but she isn’t thrilled about the marriage either. When black treachery threatens the kingdom, Morgane and Alan embark on a perilous journey that has an excellent chance of ending in failure and death for them and all of their people.
Sentences:
King Bowdyn sprang from his throne and paced around the
room like a crazed tiger. ʺPerhaps you did not understand me,
Alan," he snarled. His hands clenched into fists held rigidly to his
sides. "This is not a request, but a command. You will marry Lady
Maybina before the next full moon has passed."
Alan dared not raise his eyes from the floor. ʺFather, I do
not…"
"Silence!" the king roared.
Oh man,we just jumped in with both feet. I love that. Great 8.
ReplyDeleteNice show of emotion. Enjoyed your snippet.
ReplyDeleteExcellent. Great dialogue and emotion portrayed. Feel sorry for the son. Good job.
ReplyDeleteYour few lines pack a great visual and emotional punch. Great!
ReplyDeleteVery nice! If I were Alan, I wouldn't try to argue the point just now. King Bowdyn is not in a mood for conversation.
ReplyDeleteLove it!
Poor Alan. The king seems a bit of a tyrant. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAlan? lol sorry I have bad connotations with that name. And anyway he's the king, so his rules, right? No?
ReplyDeleteWow- that king is angry! Love the physical you gave us to show it.
ReplyDelete~Summer
This is such a great story, with rich world building and complex characters! Loving it! :)
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your snippet.
ReplyDeleteIf you don't mind a helpful hint...you said you book just came out so I wanted to click over to Amazon to check it out...but couldn't find a link. It's possible that I missed the link, but if not, maybe you'd like to include one?
WOW! Exciting and I felt it all the way here in NY.
ReplyDeleteOh dear, why are Kings always so lacking in understanding about true love LOL! An excellent beginning, terrific snippet.
ReplyDeleteThat's a lot of emotion and tension in just eight sentences! Well done.
ReplyDeleteHello conflict. I'm looking forward to reading more from this one.
ReplyDeleteOh, I could feel the room shudder with that last sentence. Excellent descriptions!
ReplyDeleteSounds like someone's gettin' hitched . . . :D
ReplyDeleteWell I feel for him, but I don't think he has much choice. You can't argue with that last line.
ReplyDeleteOooh! Love the blurb and it just got me all geared up for the following sentences. I can't wait to read this! Sounds like an amazing story!
ReplyDeleteExcellent conflict. Sounds like a great book!
ReplyDeleteUh oh, better do as you're told Alan or run away!
ReplyDeleteGripping! Don't annoy the King. I too feel sorry for the son. Great excerpt.
ReplyDeleteWhoa, talk about being stuck. Great snippet, Elaine. :)
ReplyDeleteWhy is the king so set on this marriage? I do feel bad for Alan. Emotional snippet.
ReplyDeleteOoo, forced marriage! Definitely felt the tension here. Great 8! :D
ReplyDeleteI love the premise here, Elaine! Very exciting snippet too! Looking forward to more! :)
ReplyDeleteThis rings so true for royal families! Great snippet.
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
I can't imagine being in such a situation. You convey the scene really well.
ReplyDeleteAn arranged royal marriage. Perfect vehicle to launch his angst from. :-) Nice 8!
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