Sunday, May 5, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Helicopter

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks so much for stopping by. My excerpt today is from my unpublished manuscript that I've been sharing for the last few weeks. Last Sunday, one of the bad guys who've kidnapped David and Phaedra kicked  David and probably broke some of his ribs. He can't breathe, so they put him on a stretcher for the trip throught the jungle to meet his father.


The chopper landed, kicking up dirt and whipping the trees this way and that.  The minute it touched down men in military uniforms jumped out.  David counted ten of them.  They all carried assault rifles which he’d bet they knew how to use.  Maybe they were marines, but he’d bet Special Ops.

The man in front approached Rafael.  “I’m Colonel Russell Sanford,” he shouted over the roar of the chopper blades.  “President Lovinggood requests you release his son and Miss Beckwith to me.”
 
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23 comments:

  1. Summer RossMay 5, 2013 at 1:24 AM

    Thank you for sharing these 8-
    One consideration for you would be to explain why he'd think special ops?

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  2. Sarah WMay 5, 2013 at 8:57 AM

    Whoa. When the president sends in the cavalry, he doesn't mess around, does he?

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  3. gemma parkesMay 5, 2013 at 10:16 AM

    President Lovingood? I would like to meet him! Great imagery.

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  4. UnknownMay 5, 2013 at 10:40 AM

    They must be very important to the pres. Makes me wonder why. Nice eight.

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  5. LaurenMay 5, 2013 at 10:42 AM

    Great set up! I like the tension it builds!

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  6. AnonymousMay 5, 2013 at 11:36 AM

    Out of the jungle and into mess with his daddy. This is terrific.

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  7. India MastersMay 5, 2013 at 11:41 AM

    I do love special ops. Will stay tuned.

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  8. Virginia KellyMay 5, 2013 at 12:30 PM

    He "requests"... with a bunch of spec ops guys. Love it!

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  9. Monica Enderle PierceMay 5, 2013 at 12:49 PM

    Seems like a whole boatload of messiness, but who're the bad guys and who are the heroes? I suspect not all is as it seems.

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  10. Veronica ScottMay 5, 2013 at 12:58 PM

    Well I hope this extraction goes smoothly but i'm on the edge of my chair - terrific snippet!

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  11. sueMay 5, 2013 at 1:04 PM

    You’ve got quite the espionage thriller .. going on here


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  12. Debbie D. May 5, 2013 at 1:13 PM

    Don't mess with the president, yes? Great name you gave him too. :-) Looking forward to the next instalment.

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  13. Sue Ann BowlingMay 5, 2013 at 1:29 PM

    I still want to know what the leverage is.

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  14. sueMay 5, 2013 at 2:17 PM

    If someone like yourself never heard of it, maybe it is strictly a screen writing device. Thank you

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  15. UnknownMay 5, 2013 at 2:23 PM

    Great action, once again! This story continues to intrigue me. Well done, Elaine!

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  16. JennaMay 5, 2013 at 6:20 PM

    Somehow this seems to be going too smoothly. I suspect there will be a monkey wrench thrown into the bargain just for good measure! Great 8 though. :)

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  17. Karen Michelle NuttMay 5, 2013 at 6:25 PM

    Go pres! Great snippet! Love the imagery!

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  18. Kylie ScottMay 5, 2013 at 6:42 PM

    Things are picking up pace here. Nice 8.

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  19. Ella Quinn - Romance NovelistMay 5, 2013 at 8:20 PM

    Great eight. Love how this is going.

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  20. Ann SwannMay 6, 2013 at 2:30 AM

    Love your writing. I could see those trees clearly.

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  21. Susan StuckeyMay 6, 2013 at 10:29 AM

    Good snippet - hmmm President's son - now THAT does up the curiosity factor of everything!! Definitely want to find out more. Thanks for sharing.

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  22. Elyzabeth M. VaLeyMay 6, 2013 at 2:31 PM

    I get more and more intrigued every Sunday... where is this going?

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  23. Siobhan MuirMay 6, 2013 at 6:33 PM

    Hmm, sounds like they mean business, but I'm not convinced the captors will comply. Good snippet, Elaine.

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