Saturday, June 22, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: The Prison

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. My excerpt today comes from The Enchanted my new fantasy romance. Last week we saw that because my hero Alan wouldn't marry the woman his father the king selected for you, the king sentenced him to a year in prison. We pick up with Prince Alan meeting the man who manages the prison.  When you've finished here, you can find more lovely sentences at http://www.wewriwa.comhttp://www.wewriwa.com  


Keeper Kynthelig's long, thin fingers tapped against the

parchment the king had sent him. He laid it aside and looked his

prisoner over. ʺHow tall are you?" he asked.
 

ʺSix feet, three inches,ʺ Alan replied, his voice flat and even.
 

ʺYou will address me as Keeper Kynthelig. For one so tall,

you are not well muscled. Did you not train as a warrior with your

brother?"
 

ʺNo, Keeper Kynthelig, I did not."


So far so good, but check back next week to see how Alan's luck changes.  The Enchanted is available at most online retail outlets.


Blurb:
 Forced by his father into a marriage he didn’t want, Prince Alan soon finds that his bride isn’t the sweet, submissive creature he expected. Morgane has the heart of a dragon and beauty beyond compare, but she isn’t thrilled about the marriage either. When black treachery threatens the kingdom, Morgane and Alan embark on a perilous journey that has an excellent chance of ending in failure and death for them and all of their people.


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13 comments:

  1. LindaJune 23, 2013 at 8:34 AM

    The Keeper doesn't sound like a bad guy, he might be more reasonable than the king.

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  2. sueJune 23, 2013 at 9:26 AM

    so he's actually going to prison ...this does not sound good

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  3. AnonymousJune 23, 2013 at 9:35 AM

    Foreshadowing well done. Good eight.

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  4. Carrie-AnneJune 23, 2013 at 10:51 AM

    I wonder where the Keeper is going with this line of questioning.

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  5. Veronica ScottJune 23, 2013 at 12:00 PM

    Intriguing new development in this story. Excellent excerpt!

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  6. OwlladyJune 23, 2013 at 12:22 PM

    Alan can't be at ease with this, no wonder his voice is flat. The Keeper, at this point, seems to me like he could either be sympathetic to Alan or he could treat him bad if he thinks royalty should be knocked down a few pegs. Nice choice for the snippet.

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  7. gemma parkesJune 23, 2013 at 1:51 PM

    Great snippet, wondering what's going to happen next and what his intentions are as he's clearly taking stock!

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  8. J.M. BlackmanJune 23, 2013 at 4:58 PM

    The Keeper sounds more than a little intimidating, but Alan doesn't seem to be scared--just resigned. I hope he'll be alright. The Keeper's questions don't bode well, though.

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  9. Teresa CypherJune 23, 2013 at 8:10 PM

    Oh my, Alan is in for bad things! :-) Good eight, Elaine.

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  10. UnknownJune 23, 2013 at 10:46 PM

    Nothing like adding insult to injury - poor Alan, I do hope things will look up:)
    WriterlySam

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  11. oil on canvasJune 23, 2013 at 11:00 PM

    sounds interesting... must follow! thanks for sharing!

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  12. UnknownJune 25, 2013 at 10:29 AM

    Ooo, he's tall! Great description through dialogue here. Enjoyed your 8! :D

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  13. AnonymousJune 27, 2013 at 4:33 PM

    I'm trying to figure out the reasons behind the questions.

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