Long shadows
across the ocean mimicked Rhett’s mood as he slowly dragged himself out of his
car. Coming home at the end of a long session in Washington always thrilled
him, but tonight… Drawing a deep breath, he ignored the majesty of the sea and
the fresh-smelling, salty breeze and went inside.
“Why, Rhett,
you’re early,” Alex cried, her face aglow. She set down a wine glass and danced
over to greet him, looking very much like poetry in motion. He
threw his arms around her and buried his face in her hair, well aware that this
was the last time he’d touch her before he ripped their lives apart. Once she found out what he had to say their
world would be different no matter what she decided to do.
His head buzzed and he felt dizzy as emotion
ripped and tore at his vitals; what would he do if she left him?
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Whoa, this is terribly intriguing. Nicely done snippet, Elaine. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteColor me intrigued. I'm dying to know what it is that he has to tell her.
ReplyDeleteWhat does he have to tell her? He's so upset... great snippet.
ReplyDeleteUuuuugh! WHAT does he have to tell her. Excellent job of sucking the reader in, Elaine!
ReplyDeleteWrite faster! This is already on my TBR! :-)
What a tease. 'm afraid to find out what he's done. (But of course I need to know and I'll be back.)
ReplyDeleteExcellent snippet that put me right in the scene with them. Great tension for the following scene.
ReplyDeleteNow what, now what?? Great sense of suspense here.
ReplyDeletePossible tweak: maybe drop "his head buzzed" or "he felt dizzy" since the meaning of both is almost the same.
It reads great though. Very smooth.
Wow, what the heck does he have to say to her?
ReplyDeleteLovely description setting the scene and then POW!Suspense ahead. Exceptional snippet.
ReplyDeleteBoy, what happened in this last trip?
ReplyDeleteLives ripped apart - don't like the sound of that
ReplyDeleteWow! I so want to know what he has to tell her! Great job building suspense!
ReplyDeleteAmy Durham
What a lot of emotion and scene setting packed into this snippet. Very nicely written, and quite the cliff hanger as well.
ReplyDeleteOh my, intense. You really capture that feeling of the last few minutes before the whole world changes due to some announcement. Mnor quibble, just me, but the name Rhett takes me straight to GWTW. Sorry! Excellent excerpt, can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteVery intriguing. He's definitely worried about the outcome. Nice snippet.
ReplyDeleteLike everyone else, I can't wait to see what news he's bringing!
ReplyDeleteGreat set up, Elaine!