Saturday, June 7, 2014

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors

Welcome to Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors. My sample today is still from my current WIP. It has no name and is totally unedited so if you see anything give a holler. When you finish here, you can find more excerpts at:

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In this excerpt, my hero just told his wife he'd had an affair and had a child with the woman.

“If you’ll excuse me, I think I’ll have a nap,” she said, her voice breathless and strained. She refused to look at him. “I’m so tired all of a sudden, way too tired to talk about this.”
He found vent for his emotions in anger. “You damn well don’t want a nap; this is the way you always act when you don’t want to face something.”

“I’m sorry.” She shook her head as if she were trying hard to focus. “I have no idea what you’re talking about.”

If you're wondering why all the beach pictures, Alex and Rhett live at the Isle of Palms near Charleston, SC.
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13 comments:

  1. P.T.WyantJune 8, 2014 at 1:26 AM

    Avoidance... I love the realism in that.

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  2. Gem SivadJune 8, 2014 at 7:35 AM

    What a heartbreaking situation. He obviously doesn't want to hurt her (more) but... she can damn well have a nap after that news.

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  3. FCEtierJune 8, 2014 at 8:09 AM

    Shock, denial, fear, anger.
    It will be interesting to see if she turns her anger positive or negative.
    Nice 8!

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  4. Veronica ScottJune 8, 2014 at 11:11 AM

    Hmmm, her reaction is FASCINATING. Hints at all kinds of things, can;t wait for more. Great 8!

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  5. BotanistJune 8, 2014 at 11:17 AM

    Aah! Procrastination. The answer to all the world's ills :)

    This pair of reactions hints at long-standing problems between them.

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  6. Charmaine GordonJune 8, 2014 at 1:13 PM

    I agree with Botanist. My first thought is they've had long standing problems and he had an affair. More trouble ahead brought on with a son not hers. YIKES! We're hooked.

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  7. Teresa CypherJune 8, 2014 at 2:16 PM

    Yeah...I'm with Gem on this one. And I think he's really got some nerve--getting angry after he dropped a bombshell like that one. Good 8, Elaine.

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  8. AnonymousJune 8, 2014 at 5:18 PM

    Very interesting actions and reactions. You reveal a lot about your characters in a few lines. Great eight.

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  9. Sue Ann BowlingJune 8, 2014 at 7:52 PM

    Not sure hero is the right thing to call him.

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  10. JTsuruokaJune 8, 2014 at 10:46 PM

    Effective. You've packed a lot of emotions into a small space.

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  11. HistorySleuthJune 8, 2014 at 10:50 PM

    Well that snippet sure told a lot about their relationship. Very true to life. Definitely some distance there. Good job!
    History Sleuth's Milk Carton Murders

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  12. Sarah WJune 9, 2014 at 9:14 AM

    Interesting coping mechanism! Can't wait to read more, Elaine!

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  13. UnknownJune 9, 2014 at 11:02 PM

    Yeah, I'm not sure he's a hero...jerk seems a much better word!

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