Saturday, July 19, 2014

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors

My snippet today is from my still unnamed WIP. If you've been following you know that my hero had a one night stand, and when the woman died, he found out that the two of them had had a child. The little boy is coming to live with my hero and his wife. Naturally, she isn't taking it too well. This is what happened after Alex met her new stepson. Rhett is the husband.


No. She didn’t want to talk to Rhett. Not now. “Later. I need a drink even if you don’t.”

She hurried away without another word and poured herself a large bourbon. She didn’t like bourbon, never had, but it was handy, and if she was lucky it would take the edge off the unremitting anxiety she had suffered all day. She bolted out the back door and sat down on the steps to have her drink in peace, and when she finished the first one, she had a second. 


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picture: By Methem (Mikko J. Putkonen) (Own work) [Public domain], via Wikimedia Commons

16 comments:

  1. You are really tackling some emotional issues in this book, Elaine. I applaud you for that. I don't know how I'd feel if I were in her shoes. It must be bad if she's turned to the bottle. Good snippet.

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  2. Nicely done with showing the emotional distress in her actions. Great 8!

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  3. And maybe she'll have a third. Hope she doesn't keep that bottle close by because the situation she's in will call for a lot of control. (Great writing)

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  4. I can certainly see her turning to alcohol to "take the edge off" this difficult situation. Interesting angle that she's drinking something she doesn't like. Hopefully that means she won't drink too much.

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  5. In a situation as tough as this, I'd understand if she got completely drunk; that way she wouldn't have to think about the real problems for a while.

    Not that I applaud that, but it's understandable!

    Your writing is nice and clear, Elaine. Your characters are definitely sympathetic.

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  6. Oh dear, maybe not the best way to prepare for meeting the boy, but certainly realistic. I feel badly for everyone in this story, which is the power of your writing! Terrific snippet...

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  7. I can't imagine her turmoil (and her betrayal). Great snippet, Elaine.

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  8. I think it will be a while before she can talk to her husband again. Totally credible reactions.

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  9. I'm glad she's taking the time she needs. She certainly has a lot to process. I still want to give her a hug.

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  10. I don't think bourbon is the answer, but it's a very realistic copying mechanism!

    Great snippet, Elaine!

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  11. I hope the drink doesn't make her say or do something that she'll want to take back later. Oh, you've got me nervous for the little boy, and unsure about her. It's not his fault, but she's not handling his intrusion into her life well at all.

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  12. Elaine, she's getting looped and you've knocked this writer for a loop. YIKES! What a terrible situation. They'd both better grow up and take care for the child's sake. Meanwhile, bourbon? Great scene. You've got us on the edge.

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  13. Great scene, terrible way of dealing with stress.

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  14. Thanks for sharing. I am almost 56 and I have never tasted Jim Beam!

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  15. Well captured. I know that feeling of needing a drink that badly all too well.

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  16. Outch, that second sounds like bad news. I think what she needs most is a holiday, far far away, for a while.

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