Saturday, September 6, 2014

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, your chance to sample the work of a varied and talented group of authors. You'll find links to both groups at the end of the post. In my excerpt today, which is from my September 23 release Rest Thy Head, my heroine tells her mother that she walked in on her fiance with another woman. This is her mother's response.

With a suddenness that stunned Peyton, her mother grabbed
her and shook her until her hair tumbled around her shoulders.
“Don’t ever speak to me in that fashion again!”

The ringing of the doorbell brought Eleanor to her feet. “You
remember what I said. I’ve got a lot invested in you, and I have no
intention of losing Drew to a hussy like Megan Thomas.”

She strode from the room, leaving Peyton too shocked to
even cry. A moment later Eleanor called from downstairs, “Peyton,
Drew is here to see you.”

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12 comments:

  1. Catch My WordsSeptember 6, 2014 at 11:48 PM

    This is a fabulous snippet. Mom doesn't want to hear the truth, and it makes me wonder what she's to do or the kind of future she'll have. Well done.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com/2014/09/weekend-writing-warriors-september-6.html

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 7, 2014 at 3:18 AM

    Great work. Really enjoyed the snippet.

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  3. Sarah WSeptember 7, 2014 at 8:25 AM

    With a mother like that, who needs enemies? :P

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  4. FCEtierSeptember 7, 2014 at 8:57 AM

    Don't ever tell me the truth again! You hear me?

    You captured the moment with accuracy and horror.

    Kudos!

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  5. Siobhan MuirSeptember 7, 2014 at 11:30 AM

    Holy crap! So she's supposed to do this for her mother? Good glory, I'd be gone in a heartbeat. Nicely done, Elaine, and congrats on the upcoming release.

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  6. Charmaine GordonSeptember 7, 2014 at 11:40 AM

    You tell a real story of the way families work sometimes. Not always with the kids best interests at heart. Good job, Elaine.

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  7. Veronica ScottSeptember 7, 2014 at 12:33 PM

    Uh oh, rocky times ahead all right. Intriguing snippet, took me by surprise inagoodway.

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  8. S.J. MayleeSeptember 7, 2014 at 1:01 PM

    What a thing to say out loud. Yikes. Powerful show of character. Really well done.

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  9. BotanistSeptember 7, 2014 at 1:14 PM

    Talk about a domineering mother!

    Just a thought. Maybe it reads differently in context, but just going by the mother's words later on, the opening line, “Don’t ever speak to me in that fashion again!” didn't quite seem to fit. I think she's objecting to the content rather than the manner of speaking. More like "I don't want to hear about it again."

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  10. Sue Ann BowlingSeptember 7, 2014 at 1:23 PM

    What a mother!

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  11. Gem SivadSeptember 7, 2014 at 1:33 PM

    Whoa... Drew she should ditch asap. Mom??idk what to do with such a nasty piece of work. Great writing!

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  12. Teresa CypherSeptember 7, 2014 at 7:19 PM

    Wow, I'm with other comm enters, Elaine. What is wrong with mom? You do write very real characters with all of their very human faults and weaknesses. :-)

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