Sunday, August 9, 2015

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors


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So far in my excerpts from Return Engagement my hero and heroine met on a beach ten years after his father broke them up. They find that all of their old feelings are still there even though she's engaged to another man. They've gone to a carnival together, and now they're walking back down the beach to their cars. He just told her he was having trouble saying the things he really meant to say. To end at the place I need to, I'd done a little creative punctuation.


Elizabeth laughed. “Maybe it’s because you’re trying too hard, but for the record, I think you’re doing just fine.” She shivered and hunched her shoulders as she hugged herself. “That wind is cold.”

Richard immediately removed his jacket and handed it to her. “Here, put this on.”

“Won’t you be cold?”

“I’m fine; I’ve got on long sleeves and that’s enough.” His eyes twinkled in the moonlight. “In fact, I kind of like the idea of you wearing my clothes; sounds like high school, huh?” 

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16 comments:

  1. Aurora SpringerAugust 9, 2015 at 8:58 AM

    A thoughtful offering.

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  2. Sarah WAugust 9, 2015 at 10:58 AM

    Far more intimate than high school, I'm guessing, but still a caring gesture. :)

    I love their interactions, Elaine.

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  3. Charmaine GordonAugust 9, 2015 at 11:02 AM

    Elaine, this is beyond delicious.

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  4. UnknownAugust 9, 2015 at 12:58 PM

    So sweet. :)

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  5. Veronica ScottAugust 9, 2015 at 1:26 PM

    I like it! Really enjoyed the snippet and these two characters.

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  6. P.T.WyantAugust 9, 2015 at 2:00 PM

    Sweet gesture. (And now she'll have to return the jacket.) (And what will her fiance say?) (And did I miss finding out who the guy was from the last snippet? Weren't they being followed or am I confused?)

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  7. Jess SchiraAugust 9, 2015 at 3:17 PM

    Great interaction between the pair. Also, I adore your cover.

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  8. AnonymousAugust 9, 2015 at 4:39 PM

    I bet he'd rather she removed, rather than donned, clothes...but that's the male POV.

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  9. Chelle CorderoAugust 9, 2015 at 5:03 PM

    Just a simply warm and comfortable exchange; the fact that they seem so comfortable with each other is nice and lets us in on their true feelings.

    As PT Wyant asked though, weren't they being followed, has anything come of that?

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  10. Elaine CantrellAugust 9, 2015 at 6:47 PM

    Oh, the guy is still there.

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  11. Sara HarrisAugust 9, 2015 at 7:19 PM

    I think that is very intimate, wearing his jacket <3 He seems to think so too. Wonderful snippet!

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  12. Teresa CypherAugust 9, 2015 at 7:21 PM

    Awe, brought back memories. Wearing the boyfriend's clothes. :-)

    Good snippet, Elaine. I really want to see where this goes. :-)

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  13. UnknownAugust 9, 2015 at 8:11 PM

    Men stay warm better, it's a mass/surface area ratio thing. She needs that jacket more.

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  14. AnonymousAugust 10, 2015 at 12:43 AM

    Awwww, that's a cute last line. I like it. Sweet snippet.

    But as a few others said: What happened to the mystery guy that followed them!? Or did he slip away and he'll come back later? I'm dying to know now.

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  15. Karen Michelle NuttAugust 10, 2015 at 2:13 AM

    Sweet of him. I like how he brings up the past, reminding her how they once were together.

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  16. JTsuruokaAugust 14, 2015 at 7:26 PM

    Classic image there-- the sharing of the jacket. Your story is shaping up nicely, Elaine.

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