Saturday, April 28, 2018

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors


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Blurb:

Jenna West has no idea what she might have done to her new tenant Mike Hightower. He's surly and hateful every single time they meet, and he looks at her as though he despises her.

He does despise her. She's from the Middle East, and people like her killed his friend Ramirez when the army sent them to Iraq.

Will the power of love work its magic to soften Mike's bitter hatred, or will he ignore his growing attraction for his pretty landlady?

Last Week:


This week: I'm skipping some paragraphs this week. Mike goes to a locally famous hamburger joint for lunch and to find a phone. While he's there he thinks of Ramirez, and the depth of his feeling toward the people of the Middle East is revealed. 

His mood darkened. He and Ramirez had visited a similar place when they went through boot camp together. If he lived to be a hundred, he’d never understand those Iraqis. If not for them and the other fanatics in the Middle East, Ramirez would still be alive. His heart burned with resentment. Ramirez was worth more than the whole dang country of Iraq, but thanks to those savages, Ramirez would never see his child grow up. He’d never hold his wife again, and he’d never thump a friend on the shoulder and tell fishing stories to him.

9 comments:

  1. Easier said than done, I know, but he needs to come to terms with his past.

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  2. How sad. Yeah, he has a lot of emotional baggage. Nice setup for how he'll feel about Jenna.

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  3. This sounds like an interesting scenario!

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  4. Oh yes, he's going to a dark place, clearly. Interesting snippet.

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  5. You've brought realism into your story. Anyone with a heart will feel for what he's going through. Well done, Elaine.

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  6. His sadness and resentment comes across so well in this scene, nicely done.

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  7. He’s definitely in a bad place, and sets up future antagonism very well!

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  8. That is some serious prejudice he has! I feel bad about his loss, but blaming a whole country seems wrong.

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  9. Oh boy! Very intense emotion in this snippet. Good set-up for what's coming next.

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