Saturday, May 26, 2018

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors


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Blurb:

Jenna West has no idea what she might have done to her new tenant Mike Hightower. He's surly and hateful every single time they meet, and he looks at her as though he despises her.

He does despise her. She's from the Middle East, and people like her killed his friend Ramirez when the army sent them to Iraq.

Will the power of love work its magic to soften Mike's bitter hatred, or will he ignore his growing attraction for his pretty landlady?

Last Week:
“Yes; Mike Hightower?”

Mike nodded.

“I unlocked the door for you. If you’re interested, give a yell; if not, I’ll assume that you don’t want it.” 

“Fine.”

Mike almost left. A Middle Eastern woman had no business in Eden’s Crossing! Her people had killed Ramirez. When did she come here? Oh, wait.



This week: In this excerpt Mike tours Jenna's rental apartment. I did some creative punctuation. 

Seems like he did remember a young Middle Eastern girl who’d been three grades behind him in school. Still though, he couldn’t be sure; as a young kid, he hadn’t paid much attention to girls. He liked football better.

 He had no idea why he did it, but he went inside anyway and immediately liked what he saw. The living room had plenty of space with a nice, big window along the south wall. The walls were painted a light cream color that should match most furniture, and a neutral colored vinyl covered the floor.

 He passed through the living room to the kitchen that contained a small stove and refrigerator, and from the kitchen, he entered the bedroom. The bathroom and a huge closet occupied the far end of the bedroom.

He liked the duplex, and it suited him perfectly. What a shame that somebody like her had to own it; what was the world coming to?
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6 comments:

  1. Veronica ScottMay 27, 2018 at 11:34 AM

    Enjoyed the description of the apartment and I can see why he wants to live there. It's very interesting to follow his quite conflicted train of thought.

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  2. Amy BraunMay 27, 2018 at 11:52 AM

    I might be a liberal, but I hope his attitude changes for the better! ;)

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  3. UnknownMay 27, 2018 at 1:03 PM

    Sounds like he realizes she grew up there, and he’s still hostile. It can be hard to overcome a visceral prejudice like that!

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  4. BrittanyMay 27, 2018 at 8:23 PM

    I spent weeks looking for an apartment for my friend who was moving to town. From my experience, Mike- take the apartment before someone else does! Hope he overcomes his prejudice he may miss out on a great opportunity (and I am not just talking about the apartment) ;) Great snippet!

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  5. UnknownMay 28, 2018 at 1:20 AM

    He didn't notice her before his prejudice set in, now he's noticing and thinking some terrible things.

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  6. Diane BurtonMay 30, 2018 at 5:06 PM

    He isn't acting very heroic. She was here before the war. His prejudice can't see that she isn't responsible. He needs a slap upside the head.

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