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Saturday, December 29, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday: Does She Love Him Or Not?

Today's excerpt comes from my current WIP.  This story is about how the war in Afghanistan affects a young couple.  Riley is their son, and Angel is her best friend.  It'll be awhile before I get this manuscript finished.  I just signed another contract with Astraea Press which means I'll be doing edits for two different books.  In this excerpt my heroine Anna just talked to her husband on the phone.  The call leads to a lot of soul searching because...  Sorry, I can't tell you too much.  Don't judge Anna too harshly either.  You haven't heard the whole story.

She almost got up to look at a picture of Jack, but she worried she would disturb Angel if she did so she stayed in bed.

These days Jack was a disembodied voice in her ear, not a real man at all.  She couldn’t take care of him, sleep with him, or share his child with him, and forget about building a life together.  If they had had a little more time before he left for Afghanistan it might have been different, but they had been torn apart after only four weeks as husband and wife.

So did she still love him?  Anna had no idea.


Sarah W said...

This is so real, Elaine--it must be so difficult to be separated like that after only a month of marriage.

Very poignant six!

charmainegordon author said...

As a service man's wife long ago, I know how she feels. You've captured the feeling so well.
Happy New Year.

Anonymous said...

So sad! You've captured her frustration and impotence!

Shannyn Schroeder said...

great 6. As someone who's married to a Marine, I can vouch for the fact that you've nailed the frustration. It's been years since I felt that, but you never forget.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

So sad that we live in a society where this is often necessary.

S E Gilchrist said...

This is beautiful, and captures I think, a woman's real anxieties in such a situation. loved it. Congratulations on your new contract :)

Elaine Cantrell said...

Thank you all for spending a few moments with me. I value your comments very much.