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EXCERPT
Late
afternoon. The Isle of Palms hung suspended between the ordinary hustle and
bustle of the day and the blue calm of the evening. The tide had come in so the
beach house was closer to the ocean than it was in the morning. Rhett parked
his car in the driveway and stared at the house in front of him.
He had lived in this
place his entire life, but not in this particular house. Hurricane Hugo came
along in 1989 and destroyed the first residence, but his parents had rebuilt in
the same place. The current home was built on big pillars sunk deep into the
ground and had three stories. Big, wraparound porches could be accessed from
each of the three stories.
Sounds like the perfect spot for a romance! Can't wait to see what you do with this.
ReplyDeleteI love this line:
ReplyDeleteThe Isle of Palms hung suspended between the ordinary hustle and bustle of the day and the blue calm of the evening.
I agree with P.T. That line is gorgeous!
ReplyDeleteI'm torn about the second para. I kin of felt like it was a lot of information--backstory happening really fast. But, Maybe that's just me. Maybe I don't read enough romance books to realize that it's really common to give backstory so early in the book.
The description of the house is really good. :-) Im going to send to you, via facebook, a photo of an OBX house that it brought to mind. Maybe it will work for visualization for you while you write. :-)
You have me wondering what this story will be about???
I want a house like that! :)
ReplyDeleteI'd definitely keep reading, I enjoyed the feeling, especially the time of day...great snippet, can't wait for more.
ReplyDeleteOh super nice, Elaine. I'm wondering what happened when that hurricane came through before; how much of the family's life was disrupted. Definitely an excerpt that makes a reader want more.
ReplyDeleteCan I live there? Or rent the place out?
ReplyDeleteI'm ready to pack my bags...
ReplyDeleteI agree with Teresa re: 2nd paragraph. The back story took me away from the beauty of his present life. Also I think he stared might be changed to a softer he admired or gazed in wonder at his home. Give us a chance to enjoy what he loves. Thanks, Elaine. Missed you.
ReplyDeleteSounds like a promising beginning, Elaine. :)
ReplyDeleteanother book! you're going like gangbusters!
ReplyDeleteDeleted scenes and ideas are often good for stories of their own
Great job with the setting!
ReplyDeleteNice description. He seems to have mixed feelings about this place.
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