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He does despise her. She's from the Middle East, and people like her killed his friend Ramirez when the army sent them to Iraq.
Will the power of love work its magic to soften Mike's bitter hatred, or will he ignore his growing attraction for his pretty landlady?
Last Week:
This week: I'm skipping some paragraphs this week. In this excerpt Mike meets Jenna West.
He found the rental without any trouble. The small, rectangular shaped house had two front doors on one of the short sides. It looked to Mike as if Ms. West had recently painted. He wouldn’t have thought of painting the house a bright, cheery yellow, but he liked it very much.
He didn’t see a doorbell so he knocked on the right hand door. Ms. West opened it almost immediately, giving Mike the shock of his life. In spite of her all American accent and name, Jenna West was Middle Eastern! He had seen women just like her every day of his life when he served in the army. The only difference was that in the Middle East people like her spent a lot of time throwing rocks and yelling obscenities.
He didn’t see a doorbell so he knocked on the right hand door. Ms. West opened it almost immediately, giving Mike the shock of his life. In spite of her all American accent and name, Jenna West was Middle Eastern! He had seen women just like her every day of his life when he served in the army. The only difference was that in the Middle East people like her spent a lot of time throwing rocks and yelling obscenities.
“Are you Jenna West?” he asked.
He's in for a big surprise. Well done. I feel him bristling already.
ReplyDeleteUh-oh. I wonder how both of them will handle this?
ReplyDeleteQuite the surprise...you led up to the moment so well...a pivotal snippet from the story indeed.
ReplyDeleteOh dear, I hope he can keep his bitterness under control - his shock comes through well.
ReplyDeleteI can't wait to see her prove him wrong! Nice twist to the scene.
ReplyDeleteAnd so the antipathy begins.
ReplyDeleteIt'll be interested to see how he adapts to new life!
ReplyDeleteSur-prise!!! What's he going to do? As Veronica said, you lead up to this scene nicely. The reader can understand his problem.
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