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Saturday, November 29, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors and Sunday Snippet.

Welcome to Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors, your chance to sample the work of a talented group of authors. My excerpt today is from my current WIP Flood. If you've been following you know that my heroine was invited to tube down a river by two men. The man she rejected showed up at her home that evening to find out what she and the other guy had been up to. The tension ratcheted quickly. We're picking up where we left off last week. Jason is the guy she didn't pick. I've used creative punctuation to get a couple more sentences in.It's unedited so let me know if you see anything.



“That’s enough!” Aria’s voice rang throughout the living room. “I think the testosterone is a little thick in here; both of you settle down and stop acting like juvenile delinquents.”
Jason sneered at Caleb. “One of us is a delinquent anyway.”
“Jason!”
           Eyes flashing, Jason strode toward the door.  "Mark my words, Aria; you'll regret this."

12 comments:

Jennifer Reynolds said...

Great snippet. :)

Teresa Cypher said...

Vivid, Elaine. I wonder is she will regret it? I haven't quite got a bead on their characters, yet. :-)

P.T.Wyant said...

I like her! She's not afraid to take control and set (and enforce) limits.

Iris Blobel said...

Intense scene. Wonder whether she lets him leave.

Sarah W said...

I've made my choice! :D

Oh, you give good tension, Elaine!

Charmaine Gordon said...

YIKES! Big conflict at the get-go. Super eight, Elaine.

E.E. Giorgi said...

oooh, a lot of emotions flying every where, I like that! :-)

Carrie-Anne said...

I love the interplay between all of them. Feathers are probably about to start flying!

Veronica Scott said...

I have a feeling Jason will regret more things than she will. Great snippet!

Catherine Winther said...

Great tension and conflict via crisp dialogue. I love her strength that shines through. Great 8!

JTsuruoka said...

Nice, sharp dialogue.

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