With a suddenness that stunned Peyton, her mother grabbed
her and shook her until her hair tumbled around her shoulders.
“Don’t ever speak to me in that fashion again!”
The ringing of the doorbell brought Eleanor to her feet. “You
remember what I said. I’ve got a lot invested in you, and I have no
intention of losing Drew to a hussy like Megan Thomas.”
She strode from the room, leaving Peyton too shocked to
even cry. A moment later Eleanor called from downstairs, “Peyton,
Drew is here to see you.”
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This is a fabulous snippet. Mom doesn't want to hear the truth, and it makes me wonder what she's to do or the kind of future she'll have. Well done.
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Great work. Really enjoyed the snippet.
ReplyDeleteWith a mother like that, who needs enemies? :P
ReplyDeleteDon't ever tell me the truth again! You hear me?
ReplyDeleteYou captured the moment with accuracy and horror.
Kudos!
Holy crap! So she's supposed to do this for her mother? Good glory, I'd be gone in a heartbeat. Nicely done, Elaine, and congrats on the upcoming release.
ReplyDeleteYou tell a real story of the way families work sometimes. Not always with the kids best interests at heart. Good job, Elaine.
ReplyDeleteUh oh, rocky times ahead all right. Intriguing snippet, took me by surprise inagoodway.
ReplyDeleteWhat a thing to say out loud. Yikes. Powerful show of character. Really well done.
ReplyDeleteTalk about a domineering mother!
ReplyDeleteJust a thought. Maybe it reads differently in context, but just going by the mother's words later on, the opening line, “Don’t ever speak to me in that fashion again!” didn't quite seem to fit. I think she's objecting to the content rather than the manner of speaking. More like "I don't want to hear about it again."
What a mother!
ReplyDeleteWhoa... Drew she should ditch asap. Mom??idk what to do with such a nasty piece of work. Great writing!
ReplyDeleteWow, I'm with other comm enters, Elaine. What is wrong with mom? You do write very real characters with all of their very human faults and weaknesses. :-)
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