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Saturday, April 25, 2015

Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors: Return Engagement


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday, your chance to sample the work of a talented group of authors. I've been sharing excerpts from Return Engagement. To recap, my hero and heroine have met on a beach ten years after his father broke them up. They've found that many of the old feelings are still there. He asked her to walk down the beach with him and eat a hot dog. The talk turned to her fiance Alex Crawford. I've skipped some lines. I'm not saying why she wasn't wearing her engagement ring. I've done a little creative punctuation to get the lines I wanted. Richard speaks first.


“What will old Alex say about you going out with another man; did you call him from the dressing room to tell him where you were going? Doesn’t he care where you are tonight?”

Elizabeth’s heart plummeted. “Actually, I...I made tentative plans to have dinner with Mother and Alex; it wasn’t a firm date, but I really should go back to my car and get home. ”

Richard polished off the last of his hot dog. “If you didn’t call me I’d be worried; won’t Alex come looking for you when he doesn’t hear from you?”

Elizabeth frowned. “We don’t check in with each other every minute of the day, Richard. I don’t like a man who’s too jealous and possessive.”

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16 comments:

  1. Yeah, that's a good one. I wouldn't like a guy who check on me all the time like I'm a possession either.

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  2. Heh, methinks she doth protest too much. She knows something's wrong. Great snippet, Elaine. :)

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  3. I wonder why he keeps digging? why doesn't he back off? Nice snippet!

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  4. I'm with Siobhan, she's making too many excuses.

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  5. There's a difference between trust and indifference . . .

    Nice eight, Elaine! :)

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  6. Love the tension between these two. Great snippet!

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  7. I agree with Sarah, There's a difference between trust and indifference, she seems edgy and perturbed by his questioning (I know that feeling!)

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  8. Love the last line. Good for her.

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  9. Jealous and possessive, or uncaring and distant? up, I have the feeling all is not well between Alex and her. Intriguing, enjoyed the snippet!

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  10. Odd woman out here -- I think Richard is starting to sound like creeper, like he's planning to kidnap her.

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  11. Call the cops. This guy's scaring me. Too possessive.Good story, Elaine-as always.

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  12. That last line is so telling! He has no excuse for not knowing exactly what her feelings are about overbearing partners.

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  13. Like several other people, I found the last line of this snippet the most telling and memorable!

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  14. I'm thinking that Sarah is on to something. There is a very big difference between trust and indifference. I think the guy really doesn't care about her, but mama is directing things in the background and she thinks it's a good match. Great 8, Elaine. You've got us all guessing. :-)

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  15. He's laying it on pretty thick here, isn't he? Way to crank up the tension.

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  16. Sounds like Richard is trying to stir up trouble. Hmmm...

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