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Saturday, August 3, 2013

Sweet Saturday Sample: Bet You Fifty Dollars

Welcome to Sweet Saturday Sample.  My excerpt today comes from my current WIP The Captain and the Cheerleader.  Susan my heroine is having an irritating encounter with a colleague. What do you think?  Does it generate any interest? Anything I need to change?


She watched as Robin tossed her hair and pouted.  “If I can’t get his attention he isn’t interested in women.”

Several people rolled their eyes.  “Oh, I don’t think that’s the problem at all.” Susan smiled her most serene smile at her irritating colleague.  “You just don’t know how to attract a man like Kurt.”

Robin’s eyebrows shot straight up.  “And you do?  If that’s true why haven’t you already gone out with him?  Don’t tell me you wouldn’t be interested in him.  He’s hot.”

“Until recently I was involved with someone else.  I wasn’t interested in seeing Kurt or any other man socially.”

“Well, I think you’re full of it,” Robin sniffed.  “If I couldn’t get him to notice me, I know you can’t.”

Around the faculty lounge a murmur of delightfully horrified voices broke out.

Susan finished her soft drink and tossed the can into a nearby recycling bin.  “I could make Kurt ask me out if I wanted to.”

“Yeah?  Prove it.  Get him to ask you out.  I’ll bet you fifty dollars you can’t do it,” Robin taunted.  “All he’s interested in is football.”

Melissa Taylor, Susan’s best friend cleared her throat.  “How long does she have to do it?”   

“Two weeks ought to be enough for an old pro like Susan.” Robin snickered as her gaze swept around the lounge.  “Would any of the rest of you like to get a piece of the action?”

3 comments:

Creations by Laurel-Rain Snow said...

Oh, I love this exchange...it shows us the kind of competition between single women.

I am eager to see who "wins."

Thanks for visiting my blog.

Carrie-Anne said...

I wonder how long it'll take for Susan to gain his attention, and how she'll do it.

Marsha Ward said...

Ah, and the competition is on! Great scene, Elaine.