Excerpt:
"Turn around," King Bowdyn commanded. The prince did
so with absolutely no animation. Bowdyn stared at his son's back.
"You whipped him. He bears the scars from the flogging."
The keeper shifted uneasily as he clasped and unclasped his
hands. "He is not stupid. One flogging was all that it took, so the
scarring is minimal."
oohh now what?! The king seemed friendly with the keeper, but now I get the sense that the king didn't expect him to whip Alan. Dang, every week I'm disappointed that the excerpt is so short :)
ReplyDeleteElaine, I really like this story. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI want more! The King seemed stunned by the flogging. I want to know what happens next!
ReplyDeleteSo cold--the keeper. But he sure was nervous answering for the scars. I really didn't like the King much at this point. :-)
ReplyDeleteNice 8, Elaine!
I'm thinking the King is not happy about this. I really hope he's not. Fingers crossed. :)
ReplyDeleteWell if he whipped my son i would be gunning for him! But what did the king expect?
ReplyDeleteI don't like any of them except the prince himself! Really engrossed in this story, can't wait for more. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteHmm, it'll be interesting to see how this plays out. Nice eight.
ReplyDeleteso the king put his son in jail but didn't want him beaten? and didn't convey his wishes? miscommunication or someone's in deep shit!
ReplyDeleteThe keeper beat the prince? Isn't that like committing suicide?
ReplyDeleteGood snippet and great cover
What a beautiful book trailer video, Elaine! Compelling :)
ReplyDeleteYou use great descriptive words, and I was able to envision Alan turning slowly, with no animation. Like the whipping only scarred his body and not his mind. Like he didn't care what his father, the king, thought or felt ... like nothing can touch him.
Great 8!
It probably didn't feel minimal to poor Alan! It seems like the king might have some punishment in store for this breach of etiquette.
ReplyDeleteDamnation with the flogging and scars on the good prince. So what happens next?
ReplyDeleteGlad it wasn't too bad for the prince...but still! Flogging? Eep! Great 8!
ReplyDeleteOuch.
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