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Sunday, March 3, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snakebite on the Butt

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Thanks so much for reading my sample.  Today's excerpt is from a yet unnamed manuscript that's waiting on revision.  My hero and heroine are stranded in the Brazilian rain forest. My heroine awakes in the night in need of a bit of privacy for herself.


If only she had a flashlight!  She tiptoed away from the fire and stamped her feet on the back side of a tree that she barely missed running into.  It would be just her luck to squat down and get a snakebite on her butt.  She could just see David cutting the fang marks with his pocket knife and sucking the poison out. 

Oh, yuck, yuck.  She’d rather die.  But wait.  Didn’t boas squeeze you to death?
 

34 comments:

Joanne Stewart said...

hahaha. Cute moment. I like how you took a very real fear and twisted humor into it.

charmainegordon author said...

Terrific and a scary moment. Good eight with no END of possibilities.

Jennifer Gravely said...

I really like this story. Love the adventure and romance.

Sara Barnard said...

Haha, I love it!! I hope you post more from this story in the coming weeks! I have had to "go" in the backcountry quite a few times and the fear of snakebite is a very real fear ... almost as bad as the fear of squatting near some poison ivy ... :-)

karen Y. bynum said...

LOL Poor thing! Yeah, that would be my luck too :P Great 8!

Teresa Cypher said...

lol, excellent, Elaine! I think the thought has crossed nearly everyone's mind who has ever had to squat in the wilderness while roughing it. :-)

Ann Swann said...

Great scene ~ very comical.

Kate said...

I love how the one snake fear is replaced with the other. She's right about the boas, they aren't called constrictors for nothing. Cute snippet.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Elaine,

I had to chuckle. What a wonderful scene. We have the character's fear of the unknown, her possible attraction to the hero, and a wee bit of humor, too. Loved it.

Paula Martin said...

Great scene, and one we can all relate to!

Nan said...

Oh, fun! Love this look into her thoughts!

gemma parkes said...

Well described scene!

Debbie Doglady said...

I can just imagine the snake bite on the butt! Good imagery and leaves me wanting to know more.

Catherine Cavendish said...

There's more here than meets the eye... Great 8!

Antonia van Zandt said...

Boas certainly do squeeze you to death, so why...? There's a lot of story in these 8 sentences. Really effective hook! Super!

Dana Renelt said...

So much fun, I love it!

History Sleuth said...

I loved the Yuck, yuck, she'd rather die. Too funny and very natural. Great scene.

sue said...

the outdoors ain't always so great lol - excellent descriptions

Veronica Scott said...

OK MY worst fear - snakes! I totally sympathize with your character...excellent excerpt!

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Had to grin at this one.

A. J. Bradley said...

Lol, I would totally react this way! I especially love the image of him sucking the venom out of her butt, horrifying and hilarious. Great 8

Siobhan Muir said...

Yes, yes, they do. Fun snippet, Elaine. :)

Cindy Carroll said...

Great snippet. Loved her last thought. I would have been worried about giant spiders myself. I hope you post more of this. I want to see what kind of trouble she's going to get into.

Owllady said...

Oh, funny and not funny at the same time! Thanks for sharing this bit.

meryvamp said...

Oh, no, no. I would hate to be stuck in a rainforest. Humidity does awful things to my hair, and the spiders are huge! *shivers* But yes, the snakes would also creep me out. I've only had to deal with garden snakes and even then, I squealed like the girl that I am :)
I really enjoyed this. I already get a sense of her personality within this short snippet. I can't wait to read more :)

Sarah W said...

Love this! Dying of snakebite versus dying of embarrassment. There's a tough choice! :D

Virginia Kelly said...

Oh, funny, but very real concern. Love your snippet for telling us so much in so few words.


melissamackinnon said...

I like how her thoughts turn to one snake to another in just the blink of an eye. Yikes, I think I'd we tmyself rather than go out in the dark!

Claire Gillian said...

That's really cute! I can just picture her running back and begging for him to suck her ass. LOL

Frank Fisher said...

The last line made me laugh. I enjoyed reading about her thoughts, nice 8.

Clare Davidson said...

Love how the heroine's thoughts were amusing, despite her dire situation. Nice touch.

Majanka said...

Oh, I really like this excerpt. It's cute and funny. :)

Carrie Crain Books said...

I'm massively frightened by snakes. What an awesome setting for a romantic adventure!!

Sarah Ballance said...

LOL! I love that you even address this issue, but that you do it with such humor is awesome!