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Sunday, March 17, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors: Terrorists? Drug Dealers?

Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. Today's excerpt is from the same untitled work I've been using for the past two weeks. To recap, my heroine returns from heeding nature's call to save my hero from being bitten by a bat. Things happen. They misbehave together. That's where today's excerpt starts.


David saw them first. His could still feel his heart pounding in his chest when five scruffy, bearded men dressed in military fatigues melted out of the trees in front of him. He struggled to get to his feet, but with Phaedra wrapped around him the men were on them before he could get up.

They grabbed Phaedra and jerked her away while she alternated between ineffectual efforts to either cover herself or break free. With a roar, David lashed out with his foot and kicked the man who had grabbed his arm. The blow caught the man in an extremely tender spot. He immediately let David go and fell to the ground. Momentarily free, David plunged after Phaedra. 

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38 comments:

Joanne Stewart said...

Oh, I love that he fights back! Nothing sexier than a man willing to fight for his lady. Intense snippet!

charmainegordon author said...

Powerful scene, Elaine.

S. J. Maylee said...

Exciting snippet, eek!

The Belle in Blue said...

I'm loving these snippets, but I kinda wish you hadn't skipped the part about when they misbehaved. ;-)

Veronica Scott said...

Wow, tough situation! I'm glad to see she tries to fight and that he's protective...can't wait for more! Terrific snippet...

Brenda Ashworth Barry said...

Awesome scene, has a lot of power and protectiveness. Loved it. :-)

gemma parkes said...

Exciting snippet, l hope they get away!

sue said...

love the word "misbehave" they're certainly having an exciting day with one thing and another

Danielle Forrest said...

Nice. Clear writing, keeps the action moving.

Evelyn Jules said...

Exciting, terrifying, and everything in between! Awesome eight, Elaine!

Carrie Crain Books said...

Loving all the action!

Sue Ann Bowling said...

It isn't just nature you need to watch out for in today's jungles.

karen Y. bynum said...

Great snippet! Very exciting. Go David!

Kate Warren said...

Always something. If it's not a bat, it's armed guerillas. Unless I'm wrong and they're something else entirely. Great eight!

Ann Swann said...

Whew, great scene. I loved the way the men "melted out of the trees." Excellent 8!

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Intense scene! I want to know more!

Jenna said...

What an action filled scene! And such unfortunate timing! Can't wait for next week. :)

KSJ said...

Love this scene, and the photo you posted to go with it. I'm glad that he uses his freedom -- however brief -- to help her.

Excellent work :)

Paula Martin said...

Great action snippet. I could picture it all.

Siobhan Muir said...

This is in intense snippet, Elaine. :)

Debbie Doglady said...

What a great scene! Seems like there's something going on all the time here and I can't wait to read the next instalment.

History Sleuth said...

Nothing like a good fight scene. Good snippet!

Susan Stuckey said...

well...certainly is a different aftermath for "misbehaven" than either having a drink or lighting a cigarette.

Interesting, attention getting 8Sentence. Nicely done :-)

Owllady said...

Yeah I love that he goes right after the men, even knowing they're military. Strong visuals and emotions, nice job.

Vivien Dean said...

Love the action in this. Well done!

A.S. Fenichel said...

That was intense. Graet snippet.

J.M. Blackman said...

Intense, action scene here. Automatically invests the reader!

ellaquinnauthor said...

Loved the action. Very intense.

Eleri Stone said...

Terrifying scene. Great sense of movement.

Frank C. Etier said...

He's outnumbered, but still willing to fight back.
Good luck dude.
Nice 8!

Melinda Dozier said...

"melting out of the trees"- Love that!

Virginia Kelly said...

Misbehaved, huh? Not a good time to get caught by terrorists. Hope the boot to the private parts works.

Teresa Cypher said...

Nice post, Elaine! Caught "misbehaving" but his instinct to save her came back quickly enough. I hope you continue here next week !! :-)

A. J. Bradley said...

Uh-oh.... Really nice surprise attack tension building. I especially love the "melting out og the trees" line, so scary...!

Frank Fisher said...

Oh! Was the tender spot THE tender spot? If it was, ouch! Great fight scene there.

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

Oh no, they're in trouble for sure! Great angsty snippet, Elaine!

Clare Davidson said...

I loved the description of the soldiers "melting" out of the jungle. What a scary situation they've been plunged into!

Sarah Ballance said...

Oh, no. That is the interruption to end all interruptions. Great and scary action, Elaine!