“Clariee!”
he roared as water totally covered her face. Grabbing her under the arms he
jerked and tugged even though he knew he wouldn’t be able to move her.
At
that moment something big and heavy struck the house from the river side. The
cabin shivered, and he felt it shift on its foundation. The shelves! The
shelves were moving! The bands trapping her foot must have twisted loose.
He
heaved Clariee from the water. “Clariee?”
No
answer.
Nice action, Elaine! I like it.
ReplyDeleteSo much tension here. I hope she will be alright.
ReplyDeleteOoh, tense!
ReplyDeleteTense action evokes emotions with which we identify.
ReplyDeleteKudos!
Nice sense of desperation. Well done!
ReplyDeleteSo the flooding river freed as well as entrapped her? Hope it was in time.
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nice hanger
ReplyDeleteThat's an intense snippet! I hope she's alright... Thanks for sharing :)
ReplyDeleteOh, now that's the way to write a tense scene! Well done (and I hope she's okay . . . )
ReplyDeleteOh no! Intense. I hope he can save her. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThat's one intense scene!
ReplyDeleteWhat an intense scene! Well done!
ReplyDeleteOh my. Intense scene. Your picture goes well with it too. Good for you to leave us readers hanging with the last line!
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