Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. My excerpt today comes from the same unnamed manuscript I've been sharing with you. To recap, David and Phaedra my hero and heroine are lost in the Amazon rain forest. They were captured by bad guys who took them to a jungle compound. The leader Rafael said that he knew David's father. We pick up where Rafael is calling the hot line set up by David's father whose identity is revealed in today's excerpt. David's father speaks first.
“Hello, Rafael. You wanted to talk to me?”
“Ah, Richard. How are you enjoying your stay in Brazil?”
“Very much if
you’ve found my son.”
Phaedra liked his
voice. It sounded full of authority,
just as an ex-president’s voice ought to.
“As it happens, I did run across your son."
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you've dragged me in...
ReplyDeleteLovely exchange, interesting characters.
ReplyDeleteEx-president?! The plot thickens! :)
ReplyDeleteLots of twists and turns here, keeps me reading for sure! Terrific snippet...
ReplyDeleteMessing with an ex-pres is just inviting all kinds of trouble.
ReplyDeleteThanks for comment on blog last week. I am in process of re-writing in light of class I am taking.
ReplyDeleteOh very interesting! I like the tone of this, the voice. Ah my brain is filled with screen writing class, difficult and inspiring at the same time!
Dynamite, Elaine. Short and to the point leaving this reader in suspense.
ReplyDeleteFormer President Richard? Well, well, well. That puts it into perspective. Great snippet, Elaine. :)
ReplyDeleteEx-president! Great hook there. Looking forward to the next instalment.
ReplyDeleteWow. This snippet packs an entertaining punch.
ReplyDeleteWell, that certainly thickens the plot! Great snippet.
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Oh, very interesting.
ReplyDeleteVery nice reveal and definitely leads one to want to know/read more
ReplyDeleteOooh, ahhhh! That's one surefire way to make things interesting. Great snippet, Elaine!
ReplyDeleteInteresting conversation. It's even more interesting that Phaedra likes Richard's voice. Maybe their fortunes are about to improve!
ReplyDeleteDang! He really does have connections, then! Good 8, Elaine :-)
ReplyDeleteThe plot deepens. Great eight. I tweeted.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing premise! Enjoyed your 8! :D
ReplyDeleteNicely done with this short snippet. I want to know more about the son and what he's been up to.
ReplyDeleteThanks for this snippet.
ReplyDeleteGreat twist! Thanks for sharing. :)
ReplyDeletewow, I didn't expect that :) Now the question is how does that impact the plot??
ReplyDeleteOooh, ex-President! Interesting.
ReplyDeleteNice job!
ReplyDeleteex-President of what country? An I'll make one and only one try at the captcha. Turn that thing off on Sundays!
ReplyDeleteSue Ann, ex-president of the US. I turned the captcha off last Sunday and got a dozen spam messages from someone who doesn't even speak English. I'm assuming the post is in English because she uses blogger's translation progam, but she is trying to sell things. Before I caught on to what she was doing, she sent 33 spam messages to one post I'd made.
ReplyDeleteThanks to everyone who stopped by. I love reading your comments as much as I love reading your sentences. Have a great week.
Very good! Ah yes, and now what will he tell the ex-pres?
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Very interesting situation. Way to go, Elaine.
ReplyDeleteOh sweet! I love this. Like minds. I published a similar story...hostage in the jungles of south america thing...a few months back, so I'm hooked now!
ReplyDeleteOhhhh!! That's not enough. I must have more. Very good dialogue. It grabs the readers' attention well.
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Steph
Ex- president? Wo-ho! I have the feeling the stakes have been raised. Great snippet, Elaine.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure that the connection is good. Will David and Phaedra be pleased about this?
ReplyDeleteAha! The plot thickens!
ReplyDeleteKudos!
Great twist, especially because this could be either a good or a bad thing for David.
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