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I've been sharing excerpts from Return Engagement. To recap, my hero and heroine met on a beach ten years after his father broke them up. All the old feelings are still there so he invites her to have a hot dog and go to a carnival with him. She's conflicted because she's engaged to another man.
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Elizabeth was right. It was a public place, and one set of eyes had been focused on them for almost the entire evening. The small, unremarkable man with washed out brown hair did not follow this time, but in his mind a new plan started to take shape, an infinitely superior plan.
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“Look at the moon, Richard. Have you ever seen anything so big and beautiful? Isn’t it lovely the way it’s reflecting off the water?”
“Yes, but not as lovely as you are.” Richard made a sound of disgust. “That is so trite. You’ d think I could do better , but all evening I’ve had trouble saying what I mean.”
Elizabeth was right. It was a public place, and one set of eyes had been focused on them for almost the entire evening. The small, unremarkable man with washed out brown hair did not follow this time, but in his mind a new plan started to take shape, an infinitely superior plan.
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“Look at the moon, Richard. Have you ever seen anything so big and beautiful? Isn’t it lovely the way it’s reflecting off the water?”
“Yes, but not as lovely as you are.” Richard made a sound of disgust. “That is so trite. You’ d think I could do better , but all evening I’ve had trouble saying what I mean.”
Hmmm... where did that man come from? I'm curious about him.
ReplyDeleteYes, I'm also curious about the man and what this is going to mean for Elizabeth. Looking forward to next week.
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ReplyDeleteNicely done Elaine! I can't wait to find out who that man is and what he is up to.
ReplyDeleteI'm intrigued who that man is ...... and I like his comment.
ReplyDeleteTrouble saying what he means? :-) Love'll do that to ya. Nice snippet, Elaine!
ReplyDeleteYou've entered a whole new drama into your story and I like it. The guy she's with seems to be full of bull-having trouble saying what he means. Really?
ReplyDeleteO_o interesting twist re the mystery man watching them! Enjoyed the excerpt...
ReplyDeleteSometimes we all have trouble articulating our feelings, I love it when characters do too ... especially when they realize it! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI like it when men occasionally use cliché lines. Great snippet. :)
ReplyDeleteFlirting about the moon. Very romantic.
ReplyDeleteA mysterious watcher with plans... that's never good!
ReplyDeleteI want to know who's watching them. :)
ReplyDeleteDamn the paparazzi. And what did he mean really hum.... lol
ReplyDeleteI'm also curious to know exactly who's watching them. I hope it's not her fiancé.
ReplyDeleteNice snippet. The image of the moon really acts as an anchor to keep the reader in the scene.
ReplyDeleteI smell trouble from this man. I think a bombshell or rude wake up call, a bite in the ass maybe, is going to happen soon.
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