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So far in my excerpts from Return Engagement my hero and heroine met on a beach ten years after his father broke them up. They find that all of their old feelings are still there even though she's engaged to another man. They've gone to a carnival together, and now they're walking back down the beach to their cars. He just gave her his jacket to wear and said he liked the idea of her wearing his clothes, like in high school. They sat down on the sand to watch the moon, and both of them spoke at once. Elizabeth told him to speak first, and he does.To end at the place I need to, I'd done a little creative punctuation.
Richard turned slightly, an almost angry look on his face. “What the hell do you think you’re doing
getting yourself engaged to Alex Crawford? It’s obvious to a
blind man that you don’t love him. You’ve been teasing me
and flirting with me all evening; you’ve even kissed me. ”
He stirred up the butterflies in her stomach when he gently caressed her shoulder. “Right now your body language makes
me think if I wanted to take this snuggling any further you’d
be willing.”
“Wha...” Elizabeth sputtered.
“You don’t strike me as the type of woman who’d pick a man for a night of sex and then go back to her fiancé like nothing had happened. If that’s true I don’t think you love Alex as much as you think you do. The question is: what are you going to do about it?”
Return Engagement is available at Amazon and at http://www.whiskeycreekpress.com
“Wha...” Elizabeth sputtered.
“You don’t strike me as the type of woman who’d pick a man for a night of sex and then go back to her fiancé like nothing had happened. If that’s true I don’t think you love Alex as much as you think you do. The question is: what are you going to do about it?”
Return Engagement is available at Amazon and at http://www.whiskeycreekpress.com
wow ... he's really straight forward, but I believe he's more concerned about her doing the wrong step by marrying her fiancé than thinking of himself. nice snippet.
ReplyDeleteHe's very direct and almost challenging her to prove him right. She certainly hasn't been thinking realistically during their not-a-date and I don't think it's something she wants to admit to herself.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing! I love a second-chance romance trope. Well done.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like he's had enough of the uncertainty of where this is going with her. And it seems to have surprised her. :-) Nicely done, Elaine.
ReplyDeleteOr... this could go really badly for him and she could tell him where to go and get up and walk away.
ReplyDeleteHe is so direct. I guess it's good he is not wasting time. And that was an interesting question.
ReplyDeleteWell I'm with him on this one, squarely in his corner. I almost don't like her, because she seems to be unaware of why she's doing any of what she's doing. But its really all your excellent story telling! So yay. excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with him. If she is so in love with the fiance, what is she doing with him? She does need to make a choice. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteShe's definitely going to do something and right now! We're waiting.
ReplyDeleteShe's between a rock and a hard place. Whichever man she chooses, she's going to have to make the decision soon or risk courting even more trouble.
ReplyDeleteHe could be right... but he's assuming an awful lot. It'd make me angry, if I were her!
ReplyDeleteWow! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteLove his sudden directness! It could either backfire on him or it'll get through to her. I think it's going to get through to her with a few more caring touches. Great snippet.
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