Welcome to Snippet Sunday and Weekend Writing Warriors, your chance to sample the work of a talented group of authors. My excerpt today is from Return Engagement. My hero and heroine met each other by accident on a California beach ten years after his father broke them up. Last week we saw Richard's reaction when he learned that Elizabeth was acting in the movie being filmed on the beach. This is what happened when Elizabeth first sees him.
A tall, blond man standing near the back of the crowd
caught her eye. She faltered and stumbled, catching hold of
Cathy’s arm to stay upright in the sand. No, it couldn’t be!
Richard! They hadn’t seen each other in ten years, but yes,
it was Richard. She’d know him anywhere. His blue eyes
still mesmerized her as he watched her progress across the
beach. Irrelevantly, she remembered that when he was aroused his eyes always darkened.
Riding bicycles, and old loves...they just come right back to you. :-) I think you very clearly show that to be the case, Elaine. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure if that's an irrelevant memory or a very relevant one. *W*
ReplyDeleteFunny how irrelevant thoughts always seem to catch up in unexpected situations.
ReplyDeleteI don't think remembered how his eyes look when he's aroused is at all irrelevant. ;)
ReplyDeleteWonderful snippet, Elaine!
Wow, bang pow! Great imagery of her almost falling over in the sand and immediately remembering things that are, well, irrelevant . . . or are they? :-) Great eight!!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful writing. I picture the scene so well. A lot of meaning from a trip in the sand.
ReplyDeleteI agree with several other people about the word 'irrelevant'. It's ambiguity works nicely. SHE may think it's an irrelevant memory, but we know better.
ReplyDeleteWe so often remember seemingly little details at odd moments. Maybe it's irrelevant to her, but it's not irrelevant in the grand scheme.
ReplyDeleteLoved it, especially the detail about how his eyes look when he's aroused LOL. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene. Definitely leaves me wanting more. :)
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to see them actually meet! I want to watch his eyes darken... :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery. I could see the scene perfectly Great insight to the way she felt about him, too. Got love those eyes darkening when aroused. :)
ReplyDeleteCount me as another fan of your use of the word, 'irrelevant'. The whole scene is very well-written.
ReplyDeleteI am visualizing that his eyes are totally electrifying to see them across the beach, I an understand why she would be mesmerized by that. Wow, they must be something else when they get darker. Nice description, I can feel her shock and the stumble was just perfect.
ReplyDeleteI am visualizing that his eyes are totally electrifying to see them across the beach, I an understand why she would be mesmerized by that. Wow, they must be something else when they get darker. Nice description, I can feel her shock and the stumble was just perfect.
ReplyDeleteI reckon Teresa's comment "Riding bicycles, and old loves" is spot on. Great snippet, Elaine!
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