Where is he? Surely he wouldn’t just leave!
The voice came from behind her, deeper and fuller than she remembered. “Hello, Elizabeth, it’s been a long time.”
Elizabeth’s heart leaped into her throat as she whirled around. At times during the past ten years she’d felt sure she had forgotten him, but just when she least expected it, she’d find him dancing on the fringes of her mind.
She had always hoped they’d meet again, but truly she hadn’t expected it to happen. To her chagrin the sheer animal magnetism of the man stayed her tongue and made her feel like a star struck groupie. She said the only thing she could think of. “Hey.”
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The voice came from behind her, deeper and fuller than she remembered. “Hello, Elizabeth, it’s been a long time.”
Elizabeth’s heart leaped into her throat as she whirled around. At times during the past ten years she’d felt sure she had forgotten him, but just when she least expected it, she’d find him dancing on the fringes of her mind.
She had always hoped they’d meet again, but truly she hadn’t expected it to happen. To her chagrin the sheer animal magnetism of the man stayed her tongue and made her feel like a star struck groupie. She said the only thing she could think of. “Hey.”
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Perfect bit of character building, Elaine. I love that her tongue was "stayed" and that she finally got out one word; "Hey". Nice :-)
ReplyDeleteHey is a pretty safe choice when you are so shocked you can't speak.
ReplyDeleteGreat character building, we're left in no doubt of the effect he's having on her! Loved it.
ReplyDelete"Hey" works! :D
ReplyDeleteI love her inner turmoil, Elaine. This is such a great story.
I agree. Hey is just fine but oh the turmoil that precedes the hey. And now what happens. More to follow. Yum to your writing, Elaine.
ReplyDeleteI would probably do the same. Have no words to say lol. Great snippet, showed true emotion.
ReplyDeleteThat voice from behind is a great device, isn't it? We've all had that happen to us & know all the reactions it can cause. Good snippet.
ReplyDeleteIt's so easy to relate to her feelings. Who wouldn't have a similar reaction in that situation?
ReplyDeleteReally conveys he struggle. Excellent! Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeletelol-- I could see me being that tongue tied. Great snippet!!
ReplyDeleteSo caught off guard, great job showing that.
ReplyDeleteVery "real" feel to this snippet, especially the "hey."
ReplyDeleteNice snippet this week, Elaine.
ReplyDeleteI love the phrase "dancing on the fringes of her mind"...really an excellent excerpt!
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