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“So that’s Danielle Frost.”
Danielle Frost was one of the most dynamic
lobbyists Washington had ever seen. If she had a cause, she usually got the
results she wanted.
She turned around and caught him staring at her. A
Mona Lisa type smile curved her lips as she blatantly checked him out. He felt
a jolt to his gut. Alex sometimes smiled that way. “I’ve got to meet Ms.
Frost,” he said. “Excuse me, Tom.”
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I love the "Mona Lisa" smile -- great detail!
ReplyDeleteThat blatant stare makes me wonder just exactly HOW she gets the results she wants...
ReplyDeleteWell that's an interesting twist. Not that it makes the act forgivable, but it's more understandable...maybe. :-) I like the "Mona Lisa" smile, too. :-)
ReplyDeleteI'm with Paula on this one, how does she get her result?
ReplyDeleteBut on the other hand he can feel the danger already so why is he heading straight at it?
A powerful woman can send a jolt to anyone's stomach.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
Nice excerpt, she's an enigmatic character!
ReplyDelete"Across a crowded room." Loves his wife but oh look at this woman. Terrific well written eight.
ReplyDeleteI can sure see why he wants to meet her right away! Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteI like the Mona Lisa smile too. I wonder how she gets her results and if she'll be pleased by him approaching her.
ReplyDeleteGreat intro to Ms. Frost. I especially like the Mona Lisa smile. Instead of saying he "felt" a jolt in his gut, I'd reword the sentence and get rid of the word "felt." A jolt --strong action verb --- to his gut causing . . .
ReplyDeleteGreat draft.
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It is great detail and this part of the story makes me queasy. You sure are making me feel something with these snippets.
ReplyDeleteSounds like the first attraction was the resemblance to his wife.
ReplyDeleteSo the sharks meet the wolves? Great snippet, Elaine. :)
ReplyDeleteI still don't think infidelity is excusable, but I can see why she made it easy for him.
ReplyDeleteInteresting how she reminds him of his wife.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing twist her looking like his wife.
ReplyDeleteI could feel the tension in this piece. I love the detail, and can see the draw for the hero to this woman. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteVery nice... Easy to visualize & understand. We've all been busted looking before. ;)
ReplyDeleteShe's gonna be a handful.
ReplyDeleteGreat descriptions. Enjoyed the intro!
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