The living room was deserted, but she heard voices coming
from the kitchen. She tossed her purse onto the sofa and went in
search of her man. As she rounded the corner into the kitchen, she
froze. Megan Thomas, whom Drew used to date, was with him in
the kitchen, and the two of them were hugging each other so tightly
it was a wonder either of them could breathe.
Peyton gasped, and when Drew saw her he shoved Megan
away, causing her to fall against the stove. “Peyton, I can explain!”
Peyton could hardly speak around the rage that was almost choking her.
“What’s to explain, Drew?"
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Great set up for a pivotal moment. I could feel her rage. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteWonderful action writing, Elaine. I could visualize the scene! Whew! He's in trouble now. :-)
ReplyDeleteOMG Is he cheating on her? I was there with her all along. Great snippet, Elaine.
ReplyDeleteIt could actually be something innocent, only time will tell. Nice way to get us all interested.
ReplyDeleteEven if it's innocent, if she's so quick to mistrust him, this relationship is going to take some work . . . or not! :)
ReplyDeleteI'm with Sarah W. Maybe it is innocent.
ReplyDeleteBuy why put yourself in a situation that would need explaining if caught?
Whoa, I'd be very cautious, too. And his line "I can explain" is the traditional defensive. Great snippet, Elaine, and congrats on the upcoming release. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet. It's going to be interesting to see which way this goes from here.
ReplyDeleteWow! Trouble ahead! But I'm with Millie, Sarah, and Frank. There's several reasonable explanations and if she's that quick to assume the worst (and act accordingly) there's not much hope for the relationship.
ReplyDeleteI guess I'd wait for the explanation but I surely would be upset! Excellent excerpt, wonder what will happen next...
ReplyDeleteoh-oh .. I smell trouble!
ReplyDeleteMaybe she's been congratulating him on his upcomeing marriage?
ReplyDeleteElaine, terrific opening. You set the scene so well you had all of us on edge. As far as I'm concerned, he's toast. Let's see what happens next.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet. Ut oh, conflict, lol. Well done.
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You hooked me! Wow. I felt the scene change. Really well done.
ReplyDeleteOh oh, look who's in trouble now!! He has a lot of explaining to do me thinks!! LOL!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet Elaine!
Great tension that leaves me wondering why she is so quick to distrust him. Great 8.
ReplyDeleteLove the tension.
ReplyDeleteYou've really set the stage for some fireworks. Nicely done.
ReplyDelete"I can explain" is the last thing that should be said in that kind of situation. It makes him look totally guilty.
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